Reviews for Somewhere in this existence
Guest chapter 2 . 4/5
I didnt even make it past a fourth of the way into chapter 2... story was rushed...no build up...no suspense...no tie ins to conect everything...what killed it though was bella was the most powerful...sorry every strength has a weakness...steel is the strongest metal...but even a fire heated to a certain temperature will melt it.
angeleyes7084 chapter 16 . 11/12/2016
I loved the story
khadijah chapter 1 . 5/3/2016
your story feels rushed like you just need to hurry up and end the chapter
Anna Doherty chapter 2 . 11/30/2015
The wolf bunny line makes me laugh out loud every time lol
amazingcattyboo chapter 15 . 8/31/2015
A good idea but it was VERY rushed and it was a tad hard to understand, I know the feeling where you just want to get your ideas out there and it comes all too rushed - I'm guilty of it too! Just try and ease it in, it will really help. Another thing you could to to improve is use paragraphs and speech marks because most people will stop reading when they see the dashes for speech. Hope you take this advice on board and never stop writing! amazingcattyboo Xxx
anonymous chapter 2 . 8/5/2015
its a good concept but you definitely need some help in the writing department. your thoughts aren't clear, the story lacks detail. everything is jumbled and difficult to understand and the characters lines and thoughts seem to come out of nowhere and they immediately fall in love. it makes no sense.
XXciciXkitsuXX chapter 1 . 4/8/2015
As soon as I saw the dashes for people talking I stopped reading. I hate being this person, but if you're going to write on fanfiction you need to use honest to god grammar. Quotation marks, paragraphs, etc.. (PROPERLY) I'm sure it's a good story. The summary is fantastic! But I won't read it.
Aros wife isabella chapter 1 . 3/10/2015
More please a 2 story please
B4bidden Products chapter 17 . 3/8/2015
Liked this story alot wish it were abit longer but it was still good
Guest chapter 17 . 12/22/2014
It made me cry at the end
fish337 chapter 16 . 10/23/2014
The story had a sad but butifull ending
jacksperluvr chapter 15 . 10/11/2013
liked
Narnia and Harry Potter 4 EVER chapter 15 . 8/8/2013
Oh I wanted them to live happily ever after but I guess her having triplets makes up for it :D
Guest chapter 17 . 7/4/2013
i like the story alot
crystalstar1999 chapter 15 . 7/1/2013
God I love this story. I hate the ending though, It made me cry, I hate sad endings.
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