|Reviews for Widow|
| JellyWinchester chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
Please do continue. Space after every 3 or 4 sentence making it a paragraph. Try to add 3 chapters altogether to make it one long chapter. Try not to make Widow a mary-sue. Explain emotions. Make longer conversations with V. Do a spell check and please continue writing because I enjoyed reading this fic! D
| firefly chapter 9 . 12/5/2012
I like your story, and I really hope that you will continue with it. I just wish you could up-date more often. Thanks!
| Xavier Edgar chapter 1 . 1/6/2011
dude, im sorry if my last review was misspelled and long. I was drunk when i wrote it, if you could get rid of it as well as this one that'd be nice. It was all drivel anyway :P
| firefly123 chapter 5 . 12/23/2010
Very good! please continue with this, and post more asap so we can find out what happens next.
| Xavier Edgar chapter 4 . 12/23/2010
I would argue that the character is unrealistic in appearance by anyone whose been so London would know that the goth population in massive. Even after the government might weed through, there will always be some left. v was pretty much my push into gothdom as it were, i can see where your coming from. I like your story although to be frank we're seeing a lot more of the writer in the character than the character him/herself (you're a baby bat aren't you?, same :D)in my opinion you should express more of what your character is feeling than what they are doing, people do based on what they think, not think based on what they do (I think so anyway). A reader can relate to the character feelings more than their actions as well. as long s willow is goin to be a reflection of your inner self, what would you be thinking ad feeling in that situation? sorry for the really long review btw
yours truly with warm faith in your present and future work,
Xavier B. Edgar