|Reviews for Gate Builders|
| Bing Bing 9312 chapter 9 . 11/14/2013
Well, it's been just about two years. I don't suppose your motivation to write has returned? I really liked it. I'm going to follow it just in case you do ever return to it. I wonder, has anyone adopted it? I would love to see this finished. I would offer to do it myself but I know I wouldn't do it justice. Anyway, I know it's been a long time since you abandoned this but I thought I would tell you how much I liked it anyway. It was extremely interesting. If you know of anyone who has adopted this story, would you please message me telling me who? Other than that, feel free to take my compliment and move on.
| bill560682 chapter 8 . 6/13/2013
in the 100 days show they found
nanites that controlled aging
would they not be able to give
these to thor and the controller
for it so they could have each
clone live to say a million years
old. that way they could live long
enough to fix the problem with
the cloning? they could then take
any of their people in storage out
and have 10 times if not 100 times
more people and thereby ships to
fight the bugs? also they could
likely spare some people to keep
a closer eye on the snakes as well.
an yes i know they needed to die
so they could give everything they
were in the form of the super ship
to the sgc to fight the ori, but if
there is no vala then there is no
ori to worry about. an the only
reason vala was brought into the
show other then to be mother to
the orisi was to be the one to get
the blame for touching things she
should not. daniel can only do
that so many times before jack
would shoot him in the head or
the general would ground him
from all off world missions.
personally i think it would have
happened by end of season 2 or
end of season 3 at the latest. i
think thore's people need to take
a page from carters play book
and start blowing up suns, if they
can figure out a way to take a sun
from normal to boom in say 1.3
seconds you send in a remote
controlled cargo ship in near the
sun and then drive it right into it.
1.3 seconds later no more
replacators in that solar system.
an yes i know that would wipe out
the ida gallaxy but the
replacators are already doing
as to the show were the tokra are
going to poison the system lords i
think it would be better if the
poison were slow acting and was
airborn as it's form of transfer
from snakehead to snakehead
with a lifespan of 2 years from the
first use. this way every system
lord ends up infecting their
troops and at the end of the 2
years the virus attacks the
snakeheads everywhere killing
them then dies off. if you only
attack the system lords
themselves you are only taking
them out then minor system lords
take their place an even if you
take out all the system lords the
baby snakeheads in the jaffa will
grow up into adult snakeheads
sooner or later so you are only
slowing them down for a
moment. this way everyone of
them are dead an all you need to
do is go planet to planet
collecting the children who have
no baby snakehead in them yet
and have thore's people change
their D.N.A. so they never end up
needing a baby snakehead.
in the show were daniel tells
catherin her long lost boyfriend
may still be alive and the general
chews him out for it i think daniel
should bitch slap him and remind
him who in fact owns the stargate
namely catherin. catherin in the
movie was running the program
not the goverment. so she could
walk in at any time and order the
general to pack up everything.
as far as the ori go the ancients
should have more powerful ships
then them. the reason being what
the ori 'gods' know is limited. if it
was not then they would have
attacked the milky way and ida
gallaxies years ago, until stupid
vala and daniel showed up in the
ori home gallaxy they had no clue
there was other life out there.
which means as far as tech goes
they stopped building better stuff
once they all ascended which
likely happened shortly after the
first ones showed their 'super
god' powers to the rest. so as long
as you keep the fight out of the ori
gallaxy were the ascended ori can
strengthen their troops you can
beat them every time. you figure
the ori ascended 1 million years
ago maybe even as long as 5
million years ago so that is a long
time to come up with new tech.
an when ever you run into a
system lord do not stop to talk
and NEVER shoot his guards first
ALWAYS put a bullet right into the
system lord's head then put 10
more. then kill his guards, then
toss his body into the nearest sun.
as far as the wraith go use
cloaking to hide satilites threw
out the whole galaxy. then use the
idea of the sleep chamber and
holo tech to create remote
controlled ships so you never end
up losing people in fights, all you
lose is ships that can be rebuilt.
you also need to remain hidden to
the wraith till you have enough
ships to do a first strike that can
take out 95% or more of all the
| bill560682 chapter 6 . 6/13/2013
now if i was harry i would take pen and paper to hogwarts with me an the second some fool namely snape tossed out my homework because it was not on parchment i would sue his slimey ass.
| bill560682 chapter 5 . 6/13/2013
now if i were harry i would put an end to this whole boy-who-lived nonsence right from the start by threatening to sue everyone and anyone who used my name or likeness without my written permission. an i would throw the fame were it should be namely on lily and james potter.
| John H. Ristine chapter 7 . 12/22/2012
Second paragraph: word stool used instead of stood
Second paragraph: I like the use of heard as in Harry heard in place of the young man said.
Third paragraph: might better give an example rather than slow down the reader with what might be expected with the word seemed.
| Olaf74 chapter 9 . 8/24/2012
Cant you please change your Mind?
| GuardianStarChild chapter 9 . 7/9/2012
I'm sorry to read about your rough life. I can empathize greatly. I love this store and where it appears to be going. Could you email me if someone takes up this story or your notes so i can decide if I finally want to write something. My email is .
| Nessa2685 chapter 9 . 6/21/2012
Please, don't stop wrighting this!
It's really good!
| forestreject chapter 9 . 3/14/2012
:sighs: And I wanted to know if he meets up with Danny again or atleast stays in contact with him. :pats you on the head: Great beginning.
| Jakattk chapter 9 . 1/28/2012
It really is to ad that you discontinued writing this story. While I understand life I would like to point out that it is a very well written story.
| Malix2 chapter 9 . 12/21/2011
I'm sad to here this is abandoned as what's been written so far is rather good. Although I think I noticed a good chunk of the first chapter seems ripped out of the book. So far the stargate stuff mentioned is minor. Only really the rings and daniel, oh and the mention of sokar. I have to say, harry/stargate xovers are quickly becoming my favorite kind of fics, unfortunately they seem to almost always get abandoned. I only know of a few that are either complete or still in progress(or at least were updated within the last year.)
| Heather Thistle chapter 9 . 12/1/2011
I'm sorry to see this story go. It's really good. I especially liked the interactions between Harry and Daniel and wanted to see more of that. I hope things go well for you in whatever you are moving onto and thank you for at least letting people know that you are abandoning it rather than doing so with out a word like many others have.
| BabLe7 chapter 9 . 11/30/2011
well... that sucks. Hope you can bring yourself around to writing again sometime. I always found writing to be a good stress reliever.
| Shraikor at school chapter 9 . 11/28/2011
ok now that thats out i can say i understand about RL problems. best of luck with those!
| zeichnerinaga chapter 9 . 11/26/2011
i like this story very much, so update soon please