|Reviews for Hitomi the Gunner|
| Angelus Erreare chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
Format is wrong. Don't use the middle alignment. It's annoying. The very first word of this story is incorrect. Please check that. You have word confusion; i.e. "there" vs.
"their" among other things. The sentences at times are fragmented and make little sense; so I'm guessing the mistake lies within your use of punctuation, commas etc.
There's plenty of room to improve. Get a beta-reader in order to get proper tutoring.
| crazyfan15 chapter 1 . 1/31/2011
Jessy updat! this story is so great! i'm jealous right now! Please, please update! don't be lazy! )