|Reviews for Coming Undone|
| Dreamless-Sleep777 chapter 10 . 11/17/2013
Klaron the chaos lord...Alice how will you survive him? Next time on Coming Undone!
| Kohaku no Hime chapter 9 . 7/16/2013
*claps hands ecstatically* Update at last!
(never mind the fact this came out ages ago. Oops).
So poor Alice. Firefly has "stranded" her with Crane (not so bad, considering) and Tetch (OH HEAVENS NO). Better hurry back, Firefly, because otherwise there might be a mess to clean up when you return. Two Face better not keep him long!
Alice, dear, the Red Queen and the Joker are not people you want to mess with any time soon. Avoid them if possible - when you aren't avoiding Tetch, that is.
...what. What what what what WAT. TETCH OH COME ON. Put the weapon down you idiot!
"Two-Face always did seem to act a whole lot crankier and crazier when it was Mondays." PFFFFT.
Ohhh, a striped kitty? Ummm...by any strange chance, could it be a reference to Tygrus? I always liked that adorably tragic catman. Either that, or...well, I've actually got nothing.
NO. NO NO NO NO. LEAVE ALICE ALONE YOU EVIL FIEND!...whoever you are! I mean it, don't you hurt Alice! NO AG DON'T LEAVE IT ON A CLIFFHANGER THAT'S JUST EVIL.
Great chapter, AG!
| Wandering dude 1 chapter 9 . 6/3/2013
I guessing it's either RIddler, Catwoman, or Batman
| TChompi21 chapter 9 . 5/25/2013
Is it batman? Riddller? The Joker? Oh I can't wait to find out. Glad to see more of the story. :)
| TChompi21 chapter 8 . 5/19/2013
Yes please make more. This is a great story and can't wait to see what happens next.
| TChompi21 chapter 7 . 5/7/2013
please write more soon I want to know what happens next.
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/4/2012
I'm happy to stumble across your story! Everyone is in character so far and it's cool how you're making this work. Update soon!
| Whisperer of Wintersilence chapter 7 . 8/2/2012
You have made me very happy updating this!
The plot thickens! So Strange let Tetch into Arkham City? I should have known. And it's so cool that Firefly was the one to make him talk! And I think we know why Strange let Tetch keep Alice. It's to lead to the events of the game. Am I right or am I right? I could be wrong.
And how could you let Alice fall victim to Scarecrow's toxins? He shouldn't have done that! Firefly should set him on fire for that. And I'm keeping my fingers crossed that he does have an antidote on him because Alice really shouldn't go through something like his fear toxins. She's been through enough already. And I think Firefly is a man of his word. So for all their sakes, I hope Scarecrow has it on him.
PS: I love Firefly now. He punched Tetch TWICE because he deserved it. Good for him! (:
| Kohaku no Hime chapter 7 . 8/2/2012
Firefly, you are made of win. You punched out Tetch (that creepy old Jabberwocky - see Tetch, I can call people that too) without even blinking.
I'm kinda happy that Firefly is accepting Alice's explanation as to where she's from, as it's a tale that not most people would believe. He's also not calling her crazy either, and that's an added bonus.
STRANGE I FREAKING HATE YOU DIEEEEE. I...I am struck speechless by your complete lack of morals, Strange. You would send a poor girl into Arkham City and leave her in the care of a psychopath? You, sir, need to die - OHO WAIT THAT'S RIGHT YOU DO.
...Scarecrow, honey, I know you've been attacked by Killer Croc, but really. Spraying fear gas into Alice's face without even warning her...at least a heads up would have been nice before you poisoned her. Hope there's an antidote...
Nice job as always!
| MissBliss8527 chapter 7 . 8/1/2012
Yay, Crane! I absolutely can't wait for the next chapter
| Ivory Tears chapter 6 . 8/1/2012
Yay, you updated! Sadly enough I have just started playing Batman: Arkham City. Oh well, better late than never.
I've always felt that out of all the villains, Mr. Freeze is the most noble. Glad Firefly was able to save Alice without any unnecessary hiccups though.
Anywho, I'm going to guess Jervis ran into Catwoman. No fancy explanations as to why. lol
I really look forward to the next chapter (secretly hoping to see Riddler soon). ;)
| Whisperer of Wintersilence chapter 6 . 7/28/2012
You updated Coming Undone!
I guess the wait was worth it. (;
Firefly's and Ragdoll's bickering never gets old and I hope that there is more to come in the future! But I just hope that Firefly won't let him babysit Alice ever again. They were lucky this time but next time? He may end up taking her to the Joker! And nobody wants to see that happen to Alice. She's been through enough already. Although...it would be funny if he ended up taking her to Jervis if he was babysitting her again.
And it seems Jervis hasn't given up on his search for her. I just hope that he won't find the three. But if he does then I'm sure Firefly can handle him. Judging by Ragdoll's earlier abandoning of Alice, I think he would sneak off and leave it to them to sort if all out. Unless he decided to take Alice with him. lol. That would be funny.
I'm not going to assume that it was Harley he ran into. Maybe Bane? Or Penguin? I don't remember which is closest to Joker's territory. Both? I'm excited to see who it is that he found instead!
Unless it turns out being bad news for Alice?
Thanks for updating! (:
| Kohaku no Hime chapter 6 . 7/28/2012
*hugs Freeze in spite of ice traveling up body*
Now granted, I don't mind tours, but Rags better not offer payment for his services - I'd have to ask for a refund (not so much for Freeze's lair as much as if he tried this with the Penguin and/or the Joker). And Rags, how could you? You abandoned poor Alice in the middle of a strange hideout where she could get frostbite/hypothermia/accidentally frozen by Freeze.
Speaking of which I loved the details of the sculptures of his wife that are scattered throughout his lair, as well as the references to his lair and the description...by the way, did you have as much trouble as I did finding Nora in Arkham? It took FOREVERRR.
Firefly to the rescue! Whoot! I wonder when Firefly rescued Alice...given that the Joker kidnapped Nora in the game I would think that this happened before Joker got involved, elsewise I don't think Freeze would have let Alice out unscathed. I love how Alice snuggles up to Firefly to warm up, followed by Firefly and Rags bickering.
DIE JERVIS DIE. Quit stalking our beloved Alice you - you - you - !
...It can't be. He couldn't have found...could he? Does this certain someone have a name that has six letters, begins with "L" and ends with "a" (and also relate to a certain heroine)? Oh I sincerely hope not - if it is her she doesn't deserve that dangerous situation happening to her.
Great update, AG! I can't wait to see more!
| MissBliss8527 chapter 5 . 6/2/2012
Please update! This story is awesome!
| shisumi12 chapter 5 . 4/11/2012
i need to know what happens next.