|Reviews for The IRON Warriors Part 1: The birth of IRONMAN|
| AmericanGecko chapter 1 . 12/28/2010
Seems like a good start, but you need to seriously look at breaking up the dialogue sections a bit. I don't mean adding in more description. Rather, when a new character starts speaking, start a new paragraph. It helps with the flow of reading, and that is a key element to grabbing and keeping readers.
That said, what I could follow seems like it will lead to a good story.
Looking forward to more.