|Reviews for Top Five Foods You Shouldn't Eat On A Date|
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/17/2013
you need to finish this it only has 4 chapters u said u would do 5
| NotTooLate chapter 4 . 12/5/2011
Long story short, wow. really cute, lovely chapter! I think you're an awesome writer, funks! :D So once again, great job and keep up the amazing work! Now I really can't wait for the update. :)
| NotTooLate chapter 3 . 12/5/2011
Lovely chapter. I love the fact that it just builds up to the story- it gives us a lot of Esme/Carlisle and provides a step-by-step advancement of their relationship.
I liked the beginning. It was fun, grabbed attention and certainly gave the reader the role of a curious person who wants to know what happens next.
The story line is brilliant and really well woven. The story flows smoothly due to the great sentence structure and a brilliant writing style. :D
The ending is amazing, it feels like all the 'tension'that's been building up throughout the chapter was finally released at the end through that Esme/Carlisle kiss.
The settings have a great contribution to the story itself- the circumstances are sometimes comforting, other times they're unfamiliar but beautiful.
I like Carmen's character; she fits well into the story and is really fun to read about.
I think you kept the characters in character extremely well; both of them were very realistic and true to the actual thing.
Your writing style is (like I've said a good load of times before), awesome. Honestly, with that writing style you could keep somebody reading a 100000 pages long description! :)
The dialogue was lovely to keep up with as the story goes on. The words flow naturally, the two characters are pretty much sticking to their true selves and saying what they normally would- there's enough dialogue in the story to make it a really enjoyable read.
Also, your formatting was great and made the story look really catchy(and it really was); no spelling/grammar mistakes as usual so yeah. Lovely.
And the point of view that you chose is great and fits the story very well.
All in all, it was another of the amazing stories of yours! I love your stories! lol. So GREAT job with this awesome chapter and keep writing!
(huh. one of my longest reviews yet :D)
| LilMissJenny chapter 4 . 12/4/2011
this is such a cute story! one more chapter isn't enough! i really hope you can write it up before christmas, it'll be a nice present!
Love Jenny xxx
| that kiwi chick chapter 4 . 12/3/2011
That was so cute! Awesome chapter
| Just4Me chapter 4 . 12/3/2011
These families seem made for each other. I like how the parents put the kids first.
| Guest chapter 4 . 12/3/2011
At last another chapter I absolouteley love ur story so pls update asap!
| TeamCarlisleandEsme8 chapter 4 . 12/3/2011
Loved it so cute
| CarlisleandEsme chapter 4 . 11/27/2011
I think RayRay sounds pretty cool...
hope you'll update soon! really enjoy this sweet story!
| AliceCullenSisters chapter 4 . 7/9/2011
MrsMoonyCullen and Rulers, Spoons, and All Things Slinky! Lolz
I hope you update soon!
PS-How do you change your name?
| Carlisle's Fave Patient chapter 3 . 7/2/2011
Okay! this story is just AH-MAZING! it's so hard to find well written C/Es storys like this, so please, please update soon! i'm dying to see what's next! and the prequels and maybe sequel!
| TheKingdomofWaffles chapter 3 . 3/27/2011
Awww I wish there was more. :P I love this story so far, and I love Carmen. She's funny. :D Great job! Keep writing! -Emma
| Just4Me chapter 3 . 3/13/2011
Just the right amount of fluff - very sweet!
| TeamCarlisleandEsme8 chapter 3 . 3/13/2011
| tyler chapter 3 . 3/13/2011
u r awesome! n yes i know u have worked with ur chapters but pls try if u could show some more fun with the kids! just a suggtion