|Reviews for Paint your Palette|
| Dream Of Rose Petals chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
I like how you pointed out that Renesme is a stupid name. I also liked the whole "Shit soup" "Sweet soup" thing.
| pugfaced chapter 1 . 1/22/2011
Though the plot seems fine, I feel as if this story is a bit too scrunched together. Your dialogue is put into separate paragraphs, yes, but it is still very confusing to read. Thoughts, dreams, daydreams and others of the like should always be in italics.
You seem to use a lot of ellipses. I don't suggest using them when a comma could/should be used in their place.
It seems to me that you could use a little help breaking up your paragraphs a little and you have a few grammatical errors in quite a few places, but overall the story seems quite nice.
I'm not much of a Twilight fan, but I do occasionally browse through the fandom.
~The Phoenix Project
| antigones chapter 1 . 12/30/2010
This is really quite funny, i loved the numbers bit at the end, i have actually done that before :) Please write more i don't actually like Nessie but this has made her sound more interesting. Especially the Shit/Sweet soup thing :L