|Reviews for Chocolate|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/20/2014
I love it when the realisation that Ron in had just found battys secret stash. I'm imagining the face right now and loling simultaneously.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/20/2014
| watermelonqueen chapter 1 . 10/27/2013
LOL! funny as sh*t
sorry for swearing i swear too much
| Mockingjay chapter 1 . 11/29/2012
Wally and Robin officially hate Megan. Loved it!
| Half a pair of sisters chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
Okay, I like the story, but a few things are kind of bugging me.
At the beginning, please do not give all three of everyone's names (real name, nickname, super-alias). Say only Megan, or only Kid Flash, or whatever. When multiple names at the same time aren't used as some metaphor thing, they're rather annoying. If readers are on the Young Justice section of Fanfiction, it's a pretty safe bet that they'll understand whom you're talking about.
Secondly, Megan does not equal Starfire. They have some similarities, which you've apparently noticed. However, Starfire's reason for speaking strangely is that she does not really understand Earth (she crash landed there; unlike Megan, she had no way of learning anything about the planet beforehand). Megan's dialogue can have contractions and expressions and such, and has no reason to be so choppy.
| Lady AlyseB630 chapter 1 . 3/28/2011
I love this story! I love love LOVE Flash's dialogue too! XD
Thank you for writing this story!
| person chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
LMFAO! LMFAO! LMFAO! LMFAO! u r freakin hallarious. u should do an Artemis 3 kid falsh aka wally fic!
| asdfghjklasdfghjklasdfghjklasd chapter 1 . 2/13/2011
lol. I can totally see Batman having a secret stash.
| Data Seeker chapter 1 . 2/11/2011
This is a great fic. In my opinion, your character portrayal is done very well.
The quality is pretty good. Good narration, interaction, dialog, emotion, humor. You need to work on your writing style though and work on detail. I had to reread this story to understand what happened at the ending.
The beginning scenes with Kid Flash, Robin and Miss Martian's discovery of Chocolate was very amusing and flowed very well. That was a great plot-twist when they discovered that Miss Martian ate Batman's private stash of chocolate by mistake.
The following scenes with Batman interacting with the others and the talk about Chocolate were very entertaining, and the ending was great.
This is what I think of the wholesome standards.
The language is clean except for one uncalled swear word. Please edit it. This is a request, not an order.
Nothing is suggestively offensive.
No extreme violence or any other vile content.
I hope this review brightens your day. God bless.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/6/2011
Dude dude dude I could so see this happening plus I love Megan :D
| c00kies'N'cream234 chapter 1 . 2/4/2011
haha luv it!
| Writingaddict169 chapter 1 . 2/2/2011
Haha this made me smile:) Thanks!
| FurryCuddles37 chapter 1 . 1/31/2011
Ah. The joys of chocolote. Great story.
| The Wakka Man chapter 1 . 1/22/2011
I liked the idea but couldn't enjoy the story completely because you made Megan out to some sort of Mary Sue-type character (EVERYBODY likes her!).
| nequam-tenshi chapter 1 . 1/22/2011
A very sweet story!