|Reviews for The Long Road Home|
| SwiftWhiteWolf chapter 35 . 9/17/2014
Ive really been enjoying reading this story. The plot twists have kept it very interesting and the way you depict the world as its changing from the childrens POV has truly given the story that little something extra. Ive found that many of the fanfics I read with non-canon pairings tend to be mushy and shallow, so I really do appreciate the depth with which youve depicted the characters relationships to each other. Also, as an OC Malachai seems to be very well thought out. I especially like the Regulus/Malachai moments and like how you havent totally compromised Severuss personality by making him a big softie. I look forward to many more chapters and seeing this story grow :)
| sakura1120 chapter 35 . 7/25/2014
Oh no! Is this really where it ends? I started reading this a few days ago, but hadn't realized it was only about half way done until you said so in an AN a few chapters ago. I do hope you'll come back to work on this story– I see you've worked on others recently. And by the look of how many favorites this story has, it would make a lot of people happy to see it through to its finish.
I'm not sure how to describe my feelings for this story. I will admit that I didn't begin the fondest of some of your character portrayals, namely Lily and Dumbledore. I feel you did rather well with Snape, and it's been wonderful to slowly see him soften throughout this story, start to smile more, be happy. He's still sarcastic and cynical and the Snape we know and love, but the situations throughout this story allow us to see the side of him we only managed to glimpse in the last book and movie, a side we all crave, I think. Lily seemed a little too desperate and stubborn to me, though I do enjoy her character a bit more now that she's letting go of James. I love Harry. He's just plain cute, and I think he's well done for a six year old, whom we can assume from the actual books could have been a rather precocious, adventurous child. Sirius and Remus surprised me in a sad yet pleasant way. They both embody father figures in Harry's life, and I feel as though they were portrayed very well. Remus, I think, is the one who surprised me the most. There's a depth to his character that I had never considered before, his self-denial and insecurities, which, upon reflection, hits right at home. The only time I can remember Remus voicing feelings of his own life were in his worries for Tonks and Teddy, yet it's interesting to consider his fears here to likely be from throughout his life. His and Sirius' division rings true with his suspicion of Sirius in the Prisoner of Azkaban, and in light of their situations in this fic, I could see how it came to be. I feel as though they would have been quicker to forgive each other, that this friendship between the last two Marauders (assuming we can just count Peter out permanently) would have been made stronger due to a necessity for resiliency and faith in something during and after the war, and would not have suffered so much from Peter's betrayal. Nevertheless, I am glad to see their friendship being restored now. Dumbledore worries me somewhat. I would consider him more private than secretive, and one to discreetly withhold information when necessary. The way he flaunts his knowledge with Snape and Regulus and then asks for their trust does not suit him, in my (a reader's) opinion. Yet we still don't know enough about his character to understand his actions, so perhaps with time my view will be changed. I do like this final passage with him.
The, for lack of a better term, daddy issues that Harry has are very well done. Of course this little boy would resent this resolvable void that his mother, he sees, purposefully leaves open. She unintentionally neglects him, and all he sees is that she is gone for his unknown father's sake, and his Uncles are the only fathers he wants or knows. Although, I will reiterate, I believe Lily's actions were pushed quite far, Harry's reactions to them are quite believable. He loves his mother and misses her, and just wants her to let go of James so that she can spend more time and affection on him. Besides, being friends with Ron, I'm sure he's been dying for a sibling of his own, one that he could only have if his mother moved on. I'm glad he has Malachi now, and it's interesting how the parallel between the two of them and Lily and Regulus have occurred. I rather like it. I also have hope for Snape becoming much more paternal and taking on the role of a godfather. Although he can clearly see Regulus's responsibilities to his own son, Severus doesn't quite see the role he could play in Malachi's life, the importance of not just helping Regulus along in fatherhood but of learning to be more compassionate and kind with this one child, the one likely closest to him, so that hopefully he will one day come to understand his students more also. Besides, I want to see him be a dad for Harry, and a good one at that, though I don't think he'll lose his cynicism entirely. I can see him softening more now, especially after this last chapter at the festival.
I'm excited to see how this turns out, but until then I'll be daydreaming about a Snape that smiles more, a Harry and Malachi who are much more loved and appreciated, and friendships that become stronger with the pressure of these last several and upcoming years. Is all of this going to happen? Maybe not. I believe a good story has to fall short of some of the readers' expectations, otherwise we'd get too expectant with life and not know how to handle the trials we're handed, much like Lily or especially Regulus. But that's all up to you :) I hope you'll update soon, and that this review has reminded you, at least in part, of why you began this story and why so many of us have fallen in love with it. As a final side-note, I'll be leaving the country and my beloved computer/lifeline to fanfiction for 18 months starting in one month, as I'm going on a mission trip, otherwise I would review when I could, but I'll hope upon hope that when I come back there will be an update for this.
| somebody chapter 1 . 5/15/2014
I know. I know it's unhealthy to get addicted to something that hasn't been updated in six months.
That doesn't mean I'll stop coming here every day.
| Chantilly's Mom chapter 35 . 4/26/2014
I've really enjoyed reading this story so far and hope that one day you will get back to it. It has so much potential and is so well written. Thank you for sharing.
| coccinelleecolo chapter 35 . 4/23/2014
Oh my goodness the suspense is killing me! Plus I want to see them both happy together! I love your writing style. Everything is so believable, so realistic! It's the first time I've read a fanfic with such young children and I must admit that I'm surprised at how well it is done. Bravo!
| crazykrew chapter 1 . 4/21/2014
i know earlier i said if it was james... but then i thought what if the fortune was a person already marked... what if it was his death eaters... i mean even though he thought of them as his servants it doesn't change that he has saw fit to have them severe him... and in turn called them his equal...
just a thought...
| crazykrew chapter 35 . 4/21/2014
OH, you can't leave us hanging... update please...
it was james that was marked wasn't it... the comma... hes probably holding him at bay...
i do kinda of hope that james does come back, with the aid of their work, so lily can pick severus...
| Kendra Dhyanna chapter 35 . 3/23/2014
Entonces es Harry?
| Elelith chapter 35 . 3/19/2014
Just read this fic in one go. brilliant departure from canon and showing imperfect characters.. Hope it isn't abandoned.
| kyo chapter 35 . 3/15/2014
I just started reading this story all over again. I love the interactions and how their relationship was built. It's realistic and not without its issues. Please update soon!
| Soldier of Darkness chapter 35 . 3/12/2014
...I need more of this fic in my life. I look forward to updates!
| Guest chapter 35 . 2/20/2014
This is a lovely lovely story - hope you will update soon!
| randsvalstar chapter 35 . 2/19/2014
This is pretty amazing, and I cannot wait to read more of it. :D I can't wait to see where you go with it.
| Saint Snape chapter 35 . 2/16/2014
That's a shocker. So now it's a mystery as to how Voldermort died. This doesn't bode well for Harry.
It's been several months since you updated so hope you give us a new chapter soon. This is really starting to cook!
| Saint Snape chapter 33 . 2/16/2014
The meeting between Harry and Severus went better than I expected.