|Reviews for Confessions of a Superhuman Teen|
| ChrisMSMB chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
Perfect cliché of a typical school. Nice. :P
But I can't help but think that you used a bit from the first Spiderman movie too. :P
| NarayanK chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
This could have a few improvements.
Ok, it does say they scream, but in some parts, it's just quite awkward to see someone scream and immediately jump in to the next part if you already skipped a scene already.
Another thing that can be improved is how quickly things move on. For example, here's a group of sentences I made up:
'Bob was walking across the sunny highway. Suddenly, something hit his head, and he blacked out.
Then, to his surprise, when he woke up, he was in a dark alley.'
Between the spaced out sentences, it doesn't explain what he was thinking, or what he thought was happening. However, it's up to you whether you make it long or not, so you can ignore that if you want to.
Nice story, by the way! Hoping for more to come out.