|Reviews for Busted Time Turner|
| PanCakes chapter 5 . 9/6/2017
I'm sorry I have to say this but to the future kids it 'Weasley's Wizard Wheezes' not 'Weasleys' Wizard Wheezes'
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/2/2015
Good chapter, really interesting start! I like the idea!
beside that i'm french and your translation are a bit wrong:
"of course i'm, my mama is part veela, wich makes me part veela too"
will be 'oui je suis française, ma mère est à moitiè vélane donc je suis un peu vélane aussi."
"Can you not understand" will be "Vous ne comprenez pas?"
The last one is good!
| blueice2449 chapter 5 . 10/22/2014
Last chapter, I was about to review that I liked Scorose, and it's like you read my mind!
| Blushing One chapter 12 . 10/15/2014
The ending seems a bit rushed but the rest of the story was really good.
| HawayoFlitwick chapter 11 . 2/4/2013
Hey, did you get the magical field idea from the book "Dreamhouse Kings"?
| FallingInABlazeOfLight chapter 5 . 6/28/2012
Okay, so you made a spelling mistake and spelled "poison", "poised". This made it look like Ron was posing for something. Just my little amusement...
| thewibblywobblywolf chapter 3 . 2/12/2012
This story is really, really good!
But would'nt be fun if Sirius and Tonks could speak french?
I mean can't all Blacks speak french?
Anyway really good story!
| random girl chapter 3 . 8/29/2011
hi! great story! i just finished it.
about the french sentences in this chapter, here's the correct way to say them, in case you want to correct them (my first language is French)
(Of course I am, my mama is also part Veela, which makes me part Veela too.)
Bien sûr que je le suis, ma maman est aussi en partie Vélane, ce qui me rend en partie Vélane aussi.
(Can you not understand?)
Ne pouvez-vous pas comprendre? OR Vous ne comprenez pas? (the second one is more natural)
The last sentence was ok.
anyway, great story!
| TheWorldBookGirl chapter 12 . 8/5/2011
Well, I expect future Ginny would have quite a temper... ;)
Pure awesomeness! :P
| Chair chapter 1 . 7/15/2011
Dirty diapers? Really?
| serenityselena chapter 12 . 6/13/2011
awesome story _
| CheyCheyRainy chapter 12 . 5/9/2011
This is really good and I like it.
| GendryandAryabelongtogether chapter 2 . 4/7/2011
I tried reading another chapter of your story, but I find it's very bland and I'm losing my concentration. It's a good idea, but you aren't making it interesting. You have to write it like your an observer there, writing down everything you see and what you think the characters feel.
Also, your sentence structure is what makes the story bad...
| GendryandAryabelongtogether chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
Ok...so you need to work on your writing a bit. and it's number 12 not number 13.
and you need to tell people the kids' ages. you weren't clear at all with that.
So James is the oldest of the Potter children, Albus is a year younger than James and Lily is two years younger than Albus. Teddy was born in April of 1998 and Victoire was born may 2nd 2000. Just be more clear with your writing
| EveryTripIsAQuest chapter 1 . 3/9/2011
Grimauld Place is 12, not 13