Reviews for A Pokemon Carol
Farla chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
[Pokémon captured: 12

Success-to-failure ratio: 6.4

Funds used:

James stopped and looked at the separate sheet listing each expense over the course of one year and wondered how far he could get from the truth without grossly exaggerating. He tried not to exaggerate too-too much. If he had written down the truth (that he had captured zero Pokémon and his success-to-failure ratio was zero) he would be fired for sure.

James was a member of Team Rocket, and they were required to give an account of themselves each year. The deadline was approaching and he hoped to get the form done. He also hoped his boss would believe him.]

WTF. TEAM FUCKING ROCKET uses the HONOR SYSTEM? They don't keep track of actual pokemon delivered by anyone, they just ask people?

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."