Reviews for What is my Ally?
Guest chapter 1 . 7/3/2016
This is really well done. I love the atmosphere of the story you set into place at the beginning, and Fell was most definitely in character. The interaction between the characters is greatly written, and honestly I wouldn't mind if you made an actual story out of this, rather than a oneshot ;)
Silfrvarg chapter 1 . 1/26/2013
I love this! I first read the sight when I was 12 and no book has ever moved me as much as that one. Thank you.
HextheDaydreamer chapter 1 . 12/27/2012
I just reread *Fell* a few days ago and I think you kept him in character. It was really sweet, nice job :)
cx chapter 1 . 4/15/2012
there were 3girls

They were looking through peoples


The girl slowly came upon this one


It had creatures in the background and the man

looked like a psycho.

She started laughing with her friend commenting on how ugly he was.

Right then, an instant message came up.

It said:

SatanStalker: So how do u like my


XxLoVemExX: What?

XxLoVemExX: Who is this anyway?

SatanStalker: Well, you should know;

youre looking at my MySpace right now.

XxLoVemExX: How do you know that im looking at ur pro?

SatanStalker:I know when people look at my MySpace.

XxLoVemExX: What? That doesnt make

any sense, how?

SatanStalker: I just do.

Satanstalker: Especially to pretty girls like you.

Satanstalker: With very nice legs I might say.

At the time the girl was wearing high


She started to pull them down a little bit to cover what

ever she could. Her and her friend started to get

worried now.

XxLoVemExX: Ok whatever man youre starting to scare the living sht out of me.

SatanStalker: You should be afraid.

SatanStalker: You wouldnt want an ugly guy like me touching your legs huh? I mean thats what you

just said about me with your friend like a

minute ago.

They were in shock.

Her friend: Holy crap man just block him

hes a fcking psycho!

The girl: Ok holy crap, you think hes

watching us?

SatanStalker: I am.

SatanStalker: Well it wouldnt really

matter if you blocked me anyway; it wouldnt stop me

from coming to your house.

XxLoVemExX: What? My house?

SatanStalker: Yeah, youre alone so its

not a problem.

XxLoVemExX: Ok I think Im going to leave now because youre freaking me out.

SatanStalker: Your screen name says

love me, trust me that wont be a problem.

SatanStalker has just signed off.

The girl and her friend were really

scared. Girls

friend: Whatever lets just go upstairs trust me I doubt hes really coming. Its just a joke from someone.

They went upstairs and were having a pillow fight.

All of a sudden the girls friend said she had to go to the bathroom. The girl said ok.

Ten minutes later the girl noticed that her friend was

still in the bathroom and was wondering what was up.

She goes and knocks but no one said


she opens it and finds her friend there on

the ground dead. She started to scream but when she

turned around he was there. News the next morning said that there was one girl dead in the bathroom;

her neck sliced with blood all over the ground. with her head nailed to the wall. Just her head.

If you do not repost this in the next two

minutes here will be three men, one in your

bathroom, one in your room, and one killing your parents at that

very moment.

Tonight at 1:30am. Well what are you waiting for?

Repost or you are going to die.
razska'spromise chapter 1 . 4/1/2012
GREAT. I loved it you shuold make it into a story.
Pirate Bob chapter 1 . 2/4/2012
This story is mucho puke-o. I regurgitate me stomach contents all over it.
Lamentation chapter 1 . 12/22/2011
Now that was an awesome one-shot. I can't believe I didn't notice there was a category for Fell... Good job, loved it. Only problem I found it a bit confusing when Rosaj found Fell, other than that, it was perfectly perfect. :)
Guest chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
It was well written but my only thought was about tarlar... fell was no longer a kerl because he was going to start a life with her. but other than that pretty good!:D
Claire Thomas chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
I really enjoyed your writing; you were worried about how you wrote Fell but in essence, I feel you displayed him wonderfully, especially since he was in a mood.
Clavain chapter 1 . 4/27/2011
I can't believe no one's reviewed this!

Anyway, I really liked this one-shot, it had a good length, the right amount of description and a very good deeper meaning.

I thought the way you showed Fell was very accurate to his personality.