|Reviews for What is my Ally?|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/3
This is really well done. I love the atmosphere of the story you set into place at the beginning, and Fell was most definitely in character. The interaction between the characters is greatly written, and honestly I wouldn't mind if you made an actual story out of this, rather than a oneshot ;)
| Silfrvarg chapter 1 . 1/26/2013
I love this! I first read the sight when I was 12 and no book has ever moved me as much as that one. Thank you.
| HextheDaydreamer chapter 1 . 12/27/2012
I just reread *Fell* a few days ago and I think you kept him in character. It was really sweet, nice job :)
| cx chapter 1 . 4/15/2012
there were 3girls
They were looking through peoples
The girl slowly came upon this one
It had creatures in the background and the man
looked like a psycho.
She started laughing with her friend commenting on how ugly he was.
Right then, an instant message came up.
SatanStalker: So how do u like my
XxLoVemExX: Who is this anyway?
SatanStalker: Well, you should know;
youre looking at my MySpace right now.
XxLoVemExX: How do you know that im looking at ur pro?
SatanStalker:I know when people look at my MySpace.
XxLoVemExX: What? That doesnt make
any sense, how?
SatanStalker: I just do.
Satanstalker: Especially to pretty girls like you.
Satanstalker: With very nice legs I might say.
At the time the girl was wearing high
She started to pull them down a little bit to cover what
ever she could. Her and her friend started to get
XxLoVemExX: Ok whatever man youre starting to scare the living sht out of me.
SatanStalker: You should be afraid.
SatanStalker: You wouldnt want an ugly guy like me touching your legs huh? I mean thats what you
just said about me with your friend like a
They were in shock.
Her friend: Holy crap man just block him
hes a fcking psycho!
The girl: Ok holy crap, you think hes
SatanStalker: I am.
SatanStalker: Well it wouldnt really
matter if you blocked me anyway; it wouldnt stop me
from coming to your house.
XxLoVemExX: What? My house?
SatanStalker: Yeah, youre alone so its
not a problem.
XxLoVemExX: Ok I think Im going to leave now because youre freaking me out.
SatanStalker: Your screen name says
love me, trust me that wont be a problem.
SatanStalker has just signed off.
The girl and her friend were really
friend: Whatever lets just go upstairs trust me I doubt hes really coming. Its just a joke from someone.
They went upstairs and were having a pillow fight.
All of a sudden the girls friend said she had to go to the bathroom. The girl said ok.
Ten minutes later the girl noticed that her friend was
still in the bathroom and was wondering what was up.
She goes and knocks but no one said
she opens it and finds her friend there on
the ground dead. She started to scream but when she
turned around he was there. News the next morning said that there was one girl dead in the bathroom;
her neck sliced with blood all over the ground. with her head nailed to the wall. Just her head.
If you do not repost this in the next two
minutes here will be three men, one in your
bathroom, one in your room, and one killing your parents at that
Tonight at 1:30am. Well what are you waiting for?
Repost or you are going to die.
| razska'spromise chapter 1 . 4/1/2012
GREAT. I loved it you shuold make it into a story.
| Pirate Bob chapter 1 . 2/4/2012
This story is mucho puke-o. I regurgitate me stomach contents all over it.
| Lamentation chapter 1 . 12/22/2011
Now that was an awesome one-shot. I can't believe I didn't notice there was a category for Fell... Good job, loved it. Only problem I found it a bit confusing when Rosaj found Fell, other than that, it was perfectly perfect. :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
It was well written but my only thought was about tarlar... fell was no longer a kerl because he was going to start a life with her. but other than that pretty good!:D
| Claire Thomas chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
I really enjoyed your writing; you were worried about how you wrote Fell but in essence, I feel you displayed him wonderfully, especially since he was in a mood.
| Clavain chapter 1 . 4/27/2011
I can't believe no one's reviewed this!
Anyway, I really liked this one-shot, it had a good length, the right amount of description and a very good deeper meaning.
I thought the way you showed Fell was very accurate to his personality.