|Reviews for Cargo|
| rainefan chapter 17 . 5/3/2011
Awesome ending. Everyone's happy, there's a bit of Billy Joel, what more could I ask for?
| rainefan chapter 16 . 5/3/2011
I like Guerrero's very slight expression of dislike when he refers to Ilsa as his employer. And I really like that Ames was able to handle herself with the assailants and the bomb. She had problems earlier on, but I like that she was able to redeem herself. But did I miss something somewhere about her being an explosives expert?
| rainefan chapter 15 . 5/3/2011
I just love that the van "was bouncing around like a newlywed's mattress". What a great phrase!
| rainefan chapter 14 . 5/3/2011
Well, you kind of had to know that Ames would run into a bit of trouble. It is Ames, after all.
| cedricsowner chapter 17 . 4/26/2011
Great epilogue! You've put together a really beautiful friendship moment in the end, loved that. I also agree with Ilsa being upset about Guerrero's actions. You've really gotten hold of the characters in the last few chapters, especially Pen. Well done.
| cedricsowner chapter 16 . 4/26/2011
Wow, that was an exciting read for sure! Very well executed, with lots of twists, tons of action and just the right amount of emotion - loved Winston rise like an avenging angel, loved the lingering question whether Pen would stick to the plan and wow, did you give Ames room! And it makes total sense - she probably learned from Brody. Great job!
| Pacific1977 chapter 4 . 4/24/2011
You paint a wonderful picture with your words. I've really enjoyed reading so far.
Loved the reference to New Zealand and the Australian accent being mixed up (it is - all the time)!
Can I offer a little assistance with the reference to the Kiwi accent? I can tell you we all have the same accent, except those that live in Southland (Invercargill, South Otago). They roll their 'r's (much like a pirate). There are plenty of top quality vineyards in South Otago also.
For the purposes of the story, it's fine however - I just thought you may want to know :)
Please don't take as criticism it's not supposed to be.
I look forward to reading all your stories - you clearly have a talent.
| cedricsowner chapter 15 . 4/23/2011
You've got me intrigued: What deal did Chance strike with Guerrero? Solid chapter, leads up to the climax well. I like your way of describing things, very vivid!
| cedricsowner chapter 14 . 4/22/2011
I really like the way you're giving Ames room in this fic. "The pointy end" of the boat" made me laugh, but what I enjoyed much more was the way you present her actions. They come across as well thought out and well-planned. You're showing Ames here as the professional, experienced thief she's supposed to be, a side that's rarely been seen on TV yet. You're doing the character justice. The conversation between Guerrero and Ilsa feels real and the cold-blooded telephone call at the end, yes, that's Guerrero.
| rainefan chapter 13 . 3/30/2011
If a Marley round doesn't exist, it should. It's a very clever idea (and great name). Looking forward to the next chapter!
| rainefan chapter 4 . 3/29/2011
This is addictively good as I thought it would be, and I'm looking forward to continuing the story. However, after reading your disclaimer I just had to say that (a) I can't stand Charles Dickens either and (b) I managed to get a degree in German without reading anything by Goethe. Which may explain why I like your writing so much.
| cedricsowner chapter 13 . 3/21/2011
It doesn't bother me the least that the Marley round thing might be a case of artistic licence. It sounds logical, so what? Nice interaction between Ames and Winston, but I liked the last part best, with the client using Ilsa like a shield... Very well-thought out, it makes sense for him to behave that way!
| cedricsowner chapter 12 . 3/19/2011
"I wouldn't be surprised if he had a hotline to Satan himself," Winston muttered." LOL! It's great that Ames gets a chance to shine, I'm looking forward to reading that. Nice ending, keeps the attention up - this chapter didn't feel too loaded, you did a good job of explaining without getting boring!
| cedricsowner chapter 11 . 3/12/2011
I really like the part where Pen is disappointed with Guerrero and Winston clears the issue up. You throw a very interesting and -more importantly- believable light on her value system. So, Ilsa tags along... This will be interesting!
| Akiehn chapter 10 . 3/8/2011
Relay liked the story! Liked the characters where so true to the series. Can't wait for next update! Hope it comes soon!