Buena historia

I think this chapter should belong to the sequel instead.

Beautiful story but I can't say much about the ending. I guess I feel betrayed. I didn't expect it would turn out like that.

I have to be honest with you. You should minimize your a/n. It's kind of annoying reading it and I'm sure there are others who agree with me.

Am I the only one who wishes Bulma would tell Vegeta about the Dragon Balls?

It's so sweet how they both shared the same "first kiss!" Although, I really prefer the "not-virgin Vegeta. I just don't like the idea of Vegeta not having experience whatsoever. After a lot of fanfics that I read, a very experienced Vegeta seems so hot and knows how to please Bulma well.

Told you it was Raditz! I knew it was him since the last scene in chapter 12!

If it was Raditz who just arrived, I don't think there's anything Vegeta to worry about since he's far stronger.

Poor Bulma. This is probably the first gruesome sight she has ever seen. It didn't help the way Vegeta treated her either.

Vegeta sounded like he was worried about Bulma knowing what he and Nappa were doing on that planet.

It's gotta be Vegeta! There could be no one else. He must've sensed Bulma's ki drifting off and he went there to save her.

Nothing's more pleasing than to see Vegeta being possessive! I love how he didn't want to smell Zarbon's scent on her.

Wasn't Vegeta just a bit older than Bulma? The way you described Vegeta in Bulma's point of view as "the boy," you made it sound like Vegeta is just a little kid.

I like how Vegeta didn't deny that he's jealous.

I love how Vegeta seems to be the one who developed some feelings first!

The part where Bulma tended to Vegeta's wounds reminds me back in the canon when she took care of Vegeta.

Whenever it described how cold Zarbon's touch seemed to Bulma, I always got to picture him in his monster form! It's horrendous!

I actually thought that Saiyans should have their own language. I'll presume that English is the universal language and any literate creatures should know about it. That's how they all been able to communicate with each other.