|Reviews for New Beginnings|
| cmonline chapter 7 . 12/31/2011
Really cute story. You did a great job with Elizabeth, loved how everyone ended up.
| katie.pierce23 chapter 7 . 7/1/2011
Loved this so much!
| KL93 chapter 7 . 3/15/2011
cute cute cute. god, i love persuasion. :)
| sadhappygirl chapter 7 . 3/10/2011
William had always been a selfish twit...
love the ending...
love that everyone is happy especially Anne and Frederick...
thanks for writing such a witty and beautiful story...
| belle chapter 6 . 3/7/2011
*gasps* Oh, no! I hope Elizabeth is lying about that double date. She's so mean. But what's up with Frederick? Oh, the suspense!
P.S. Now it's all clear that Frank and Elizabeth knew each other from way back. That's a relief, for some reason.
| sadhappygirl chapter 5 . 3/4/2011
Elizabeth did Anne a HUGE favor by taking Frank off her hands...
good for her, her jealousy of Anne FINALLY paid off...lol
| belle chapter 5 . 3/3/2011
Thank you for adding the summary, lilkawa. :) I hope it attracts more readers to your fic.
It's great that you don't stick too closely to the canon as it makes your fic different from most fics in the fandom. At the same time, it makes me wonder how those new elements will work for the story-that is, whether it will be an advantage or disadvantage to your version of "Persuasion." It makes it all the more interesting to read, though, because it makes me want to find out what happens next.
How long has Frank known Elizabeth? I don't know if I've missed it or if it's really made clear in the story, because their engagement kind of happened too fast. It would be better if the characters' actions could be explained and would actually sound plausible within the context of the story.
One thing I found interesting is that Louisa's accident happened without Frederick's presence at the scene. It's different, but the story still moves forward even without that key factor in the canon.
Lastly, I agree with Lia06's suggestion that having a beta reader would help your fic improve. Don't get me wrong; your story is really interesting and I'd still read it, but there are certain errors (for example, "coconspirators" should have a dash after the first "co") that could have been checked by a beta. I'm only saying this because I care about this fic and I know you can be better. You already have a knack for story-telling, and that's what is most important. Editors exist to fine-tune written works. :)
Best of luck to you and hope you update soon! :)
| kggirl21 chapter 5 . 3/2/2011
Again, another great chapter. Wow, Elizabeth is something else. I can't wait for more...
| belle chapter 2 . 2/22/2011
Hi, lilkawa! First of all, I want to applaud you for writing "Persuasion" fan fics because there aren't many on the archive. Second, I wish you'd write a summary for this fic because it didn't really grab my attention until now. I'm one of those people who read the summary first before deciding to read a fic. :) Third, I looove this take on "Persuasion," although Anne and Frederick's past looked like it was more of a fling than a serious relationship, like in the canon or other modern fics. I still like this one, though. Honestly, had butterflies in my stomach when I read the part where Anne and Frederick meet again in her office. I'm gonna read more!
| mukanya chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
Too many characters introduced at once making it difficult to follow or develop for the overcrowded in that small chapter.
| sadhappygirl chapter 4 . 2/13/2011
Poor Frederick already married off...lol
Poor Anne stuck with boorish Frank...
when are those two going to realized they love each other?
| ILoveTea chapter 3 . 2/7/2011
That's new. Frederick was married. I also like the idea that Elizabeth was the one to separate them. Hmm... I wonder what will happen next.
| troutie87 chapter 3 . 2/3/2011
I love this story! In the first chapter I was wondering why Anne and Frederick didn't know who each other were, but you clarified in the second chapter. I look forward to reading more!
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 2/3/2011
You write: "Wentworth, Wentworth and Croft, attorneys at law, called themselves a pro bono firm;". How can an entire law firm be pro bono? Almost every firm takes one or two pro bono cases, but how on earth would a firm survive completely pro bono? Was it set up by a wealthy philanthropist?
| sadhappygirl chapter 3 . 2/3/2011
Poor Anne, she is have a lousy week,
I hope things get better for her and soon...