|Reviews for The NeverEnding Ever After|
| ed-sheeran-is-beautiful chapter 3 . 7/23/2012
I actually like Roman. Keep writing. This is great!
Also, try to organize your paragraphs a little better. A whole chunk doesn’t look good and instantly puts several readers off reading it, including me, and in schoolwork it looks clumpy and squashed. Not to mention it’s an indication to your type of writing; thick paragraphs give the impression that there will be more clumpy parapgraphs in later chapters.
| ShatterEveryWindow chapter 3 . 8/19/2011
can immortals poop a popsicle taht looks like a rainbow? i mean, i read the book, but it doesnt say anything about crapping a popsicle,- wait! can they crap at all? i think roman and miles should date, btw. theyd make such a cute couple, and if they make a movie justin bieber should play miles. and taylor lautner should play damen. and alex pettefer should play roman. miles and roman 4ever! TEAM RILES
| BumpkinLove chapter 2 . 3/25/2011
Its a really good story so far, cant wait to read more!
| burntcharcoal chapter 1 . 1/11/2011
You're really good at creating pictures. I like it a lot. Just try not to use a lot of long sentences. Try using a combination of small ones and long ones. But, all in all, i really like your work.