|Reviews for The Death of Severin Torsten|
| Angelic Reprobate chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
Hey if this story id of your own creation then it should be on fictionpress . net. just remove spaces. if it's from an already existing fandom thats niot on here then I'm sorry I can't help
| AllDayDreaming chapter 1 . 4/22/2011
whoever you are, you are a gifted writer! the story is written very well, very descriptive, which i like the best. the plot itself is interesting and i cant wait to get to chapter 2! my only critique is that for the first half of the story i had no idea what the setting was. obviously the twins are some kind of middle-eastern royalty, and from the fact that they have hospitals with IV fluids, i'm assuming its a modern day tale. but whos the sultan? is it a man or a woman? who's Octavius, and the Shah? cousins, uncles, family friends...? all i'm saying is, its a bit unclear. but other than that, amazing!