Reviews for Leaving Without You
Janet chapter 2 . 3/30/2016
"They had no choice but to follow their guide."

It's almost always a sign of bad writing when an author starts a sentence with "They had no choice but to..." Of COURSE they had a choice, and if they'd behaved sensibly, they wouldn't be in this predicament.

Not reading beyond this point, since I hate seeing our guys behave stupidly.
Guest chapter 12 . 6/24/2014
Fantastic story! So exciting! Loved every minute.

Thanks for sharing :)

Louise xxx
Pearlkat chapter 12 . 1/11/2013
Another great story! Loved the the last few lines. Wonderful ending.
Aqua Mage chapter 12 . 10/27/2012
Amazing fic ;)
Mystical G Panther chapter 12 . 6/25/2012
Hey awesome story!
Gumnut chapter 12 . 12/13/2011
Youch. I ran out of chapters! I want more :D

Some seriously powerful stuff in this one. A burning angst, emotional wounds abound. Kirk's determination shone throughout this fic, and Chapel appears to have learnt from the master himself in that department too. It was nice to have someone outside the magnificent seven coming to the rescue.

I must admit that I flinch if McCoy gets the hurt. There is something about his character that doesn't support the heroic sacrifice so is hard to describe. Not that he isn't heroic, just that, for me it feels that he should be the one being protected by the Kirks of this world. So when he turned and degraded it was somewhat more painful than with the other characters.

Great piece of writing. I now eagerly go off to explore some more.


(hmm, will I go to bed at a decent time tonight?)
Zelda Scott chapter 12 . 4/26/2011
Every now and then I come back to but very rarely I discover such good stories as yours. You made my last weekend and even now I am deeply impressed. I especially liked this story since it has not only an interesting thought-out plot but it uses the known characters in an unknown way.

In all your stories, you had the perfect grasp of the (TOS) characters which is for me the essential part of a good (TOS) story. I hope you will continue writing more TOS. I am also waiting for every new piece of “The Vadarian Trap” although in general I avoid starting unfinished works. Thank you!
Madtrek chapter 11 . 4/12/2011
Seriously, you can WRITE. this was impressive. it is now my favorite story i have read so far. I need to go investigate you other ones. Congratulations!
StoryGardener chapter 9 . 3/27/2011
Author here.

I corrected the "First Commander" - thanks Gilbert! Couldn't spot the omitted words, but I'm sure they're there. I'm a spotty self-editor.

Reposting means you all probably got an alert for Chapter 9 again. I haven't quite figured out the editing on this site yet.

Good news, I'm also almost finished rewriting His Last Mission, with more substance given to the last chapter, which seemed so hurried before. Will post that soon.
Gilbert H. Karr chapter 9 . 3/25/2011
Really like the story...Can't wait to read more.

Only comment I would make is that you refer to Spock at one point as First Commander Spock. That may be a stylistic thing, but in the event that it isn't, his rank is Commander. His jobs aboard ship are First Officer and Science officer.

Can't give you a specific example, but there are a couple of times you ommitted a word, and though it hasn't really caused a problem yet, it could potentially change the meaning of the sentence, depending on the word.

Again, really looking forward to the rest of the story.
sophiedog chapter 9 . 3/24/2011
This is so fantastic! I was thrilled to see the story return with revisions. It is flowing really well and keeping me on the edge of my seat. Looking forward to more. Thanks!
Burning Phoenix chapter 9 . 3/24/2011
Poor Cap'n. I love how this fic had me on the edge of my seat while I read it. Can't wait for the next one.
murphycat chapter 9 . 3/24/2011
Rewrite really improves it. Good job
StoryGardener chapter 8 . 3/23/2011
Hi Murphycat, yes I did, this is a rewrite of that. It turns out to more chapters so that is why the site is calling it an update (I guess). Most changes are in the last chapters.

If anyone has a good way of rewriting without all the hassle of deleting chapters and reposting them, I'd be happy to hear how!
Mazeykins chapter 8 . 3/22/2011
Dang - I was hoping you had added the next chapter, but it was still nice to revisit what you had. Please continue...
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