Reviews for Messaiah Reviesed
xAstarotte chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
Horrible. Just HORRIBLE. There are so many spelling/grammar mistakes that it would take a week just to point them out. It would practically be re-writing the whole story for you. The storyline is weak, and you even managed to spell "RIDLEY" wrong throughout the whole story. Mediocre use of language - it seems like you just pieced together words you ripped off of a thesaurus, as some of the words did NOT go together well at all. Too many run-on sentences that need to be cut short. Also, do not write in capslock that much - it makes it seem like the story was written by a ten year-old. No offense. Maybe you should try a revision of this already-revised version. Third time's the charm.