|Reviews for For Whom the Bell Tolls|
| Da Zhang chapter 17 . 3h ago
Please update because this story is amazing. I am not however a huge fan of the Harry with two girls thing though. That just seems weird.
| csouthcbs0099 chapter 17 . 3/11
Plz write more i want more
| paskinmath chapter 17 . 2/26
I do so hope this will continue eventually. I really enjoyed this story.
| Bethuny chapter 17 . 2/10
This is literally one of the best fanfictions I have ever read. so can you please finish it, it sucks that the story ends here
| Runecutter chapter 17 . 2/7
Urgh an awful place to stop updating a fic.
Although of couse "female problems" was already as good hint at a pregnancy as you could have given.
Overall... phhheeeeew i don't really know. There have been a lot of incredibly strong things included in this fic... the four people representing six lines of the "seven" and all chosen by magic amongst a single yeargroup might have been a stretch of the imagination, but they worked pretty sweet throughout the fic. And i hope you had planned to get Ginny nailed hard for her idiotic attack on the "rival" as a heir to one of the seven lines and carrying the heir to the already known Potter line so it's line theft, assault and grievous bodily injure the vapid headed red bint was guilty of. Good riddance for bad folk.
I've also appreciated some of the other concepts like the general idea behind Chimera (the name is horribly cliché-y and doesn#t even sound tough and cool but just vicious and evil and don't get me started on "Proeli-thingy" there is a reason one should never write a fic directly out of a dictionary... ever seen dead poets society? British and Americans are traditionally unable to deal graciously with latin words and all the less when they are complicated and consist of sounds not natural to the anglo-american tongue like "oe" so it's best to avoid them.) or how good both Harry and Neville react to the "censure"... And a lot of the fighting and what the two special tutors showed them was also pretty nifty and clever.
Still there#s at least as much that i did NOT enjoy. The spelling and grammar mistakes were as common as annoying and while i have nothing against a good bashing regardless of who's the victim the whole situation around Ron and Hermione was just ugly and far too hostil and vicious to really make a lot of sense. Nothing against making new friends and starting to distance yourself from the old ones if you find them lacking of have developed different world views or likings than in the past. That's just part of growing up. But to go the extra mile to sow this much enmity quasi without any start and then even escalate it more and more (i'll only say "duel") is nigh to unforgivable as it borders on bad narrative technique. Give me a good motivation for it and lots of character development scenes preparing and accompanying the change and i'll be happy to read it. Shove it onto me with already everybody hatefilled and eager to hurt and injure the other and i'll call your BS. Independent Harry comprises so much more facets than just being pissed off at everybody (sans Neville, love interests and maybe Luna as funny sidekick) growing hard and bitter and throwing around insane levels of magic...
and the last thing is the most unique part of your story... the tatoo thingy with house/family magic put into tattoo form to permanently enhance his body and magic... That's a direct violation of one of the most important principles of storytelling... TINSTAAFL (there is no such thing as a free lunch), which means everything needs a price or it will unbalance and unhinge your story... yes, you DO try to let him make pay SOME; but it does not really weigh up the incredible advantages of all his bodyart... an headache here and a little cry about how much it hurt to paint the stuff int he first place there... no that is not even the equivalent for the regrown arm... much less for the merlin style magic he throws around when his three power ups are active. And i think that having a convenient explanation for him getting away with basically everything without wounds, weakness or any other long term consequences has played a big part in portraying Harry as quite the arrogant and self important jerk during most of this story. Not a good sympathetic protagonist, not even really likeable except in a few very vulnerable emotional moments with the girls... so all in all i've found a good premise with some promissing components but lacking in the fine details and giving a not so positive overall impression.
| Runecutter chapter 16 . 2/6
How can Harry even GET drunk.
Your explanations of his rune scheme included a rune against poisons that " [it] also means I can never get drunk" (Ch. 3)
And trying to kill a skilled duelist on point blank range with a wand just drawn is a stupid tactic, you're inside his hand-to-hand combat range and your wand probably will end up snapped. Mort could only use his banisher because wulf-harry was a little bit distracted by devouring his shoulder at the time and he lacked opposable thumbs anyway ;)
| Runecutter chapter 15 . 2/6
Okay, you gave it away too soon. With all the people searching for ways how Harry could have been involved without knowing it, it became clear in a few lines that it was the hand Severus had "vanished" that was used in this plot to imply Lord Potter in a most grievous crime.
Hah i knew i was right, but BOY you made this hand-puppet an arrogant jerk. And so incredibly stupid. If he'd just wanted a life of his own, nothing like this would have been necessary, he doomed himself to die because he insisted on gaining HARRY's life. Why?
| lightskiller chapter 10 . 2/6
| Star Iron chapter 17 . 2/4
I really don't understand how Harry lets so much crap go. While he is actually doing something proactive, the fact that he's making more and more enemies without taking out the ones he's continuously making is literally insane. Harry right now is all bravado and 'family secrets' and antagonizing everyone he can while at the same time focusing the attention of the 'light' side on him, creating more and more people to fight against that he will/should realistically lose to. The debonaire Harry is cool but when you look at it from the outside or read it in story form like this, his actions portray an ignoramus. He already lost an arm that he family secreted back but the message doesn't appear to have sunk in. I really hope he cleans house after this but this Harry is more showman than warrior.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/30
it's official. i have been waiting for 2 years for this fanfic to update.
| lordblink chapter 17 . 1/24
hoping to see some near future updates
| redwolf23456 chapter 17 . 1/24
Great Story so far
| Diana A chapter 17 . 1/23
I enjoyed re-reading your story. I hope you will continue with the ending.
| WeberCode chapter 17 . 1/13
| Flying Chrissy chapter 17 . 1/8
Great story! Just wondering if there is going to be an update?