|Reviews for Ma'at|
| xXxTriggerxXx chapter 1 . 4/11/2013
Woah that was brilliant...
Didn't something similar happen once with archaeologists finding a ticking watch in a sealed tomb?
This seemed very accurate as well which, on this site, is completely refreshing.
It was absolutely brilliantly written and is definitely going on my favourites list.
| My Misguided Fairytale chapter 1 . 1/23/2011
Great job on this, really. It's a phenomenal story from a fantastic idea executed brilliantly. I like too how, to me at least, Yugi is the main character, and the Gemshipping is almost a subplot to everything else that goes on. It's a refreshing change, (although I would have liked to have seen just a little more Gemshipping) and I really appreciate just how multi-layered and well thought-out this story is. It highlights the ethos you bring with your knowledge of archaeology, and you do a great job establishing this strange AU of sorts. I also really liked the ending, and how everything unravels at the end - the pacing and suspense is excellent. The Munchausen thing is so creepy! But it's a brilliant idea for a story ) I can't really think of anything else to add, except that I agree that this could have been a much bigger story, but it stands just fine on its own, too. D
Great job on this! I really enjoyed reading it! Keep up the great work! D
Jess (My Misguided Fairytale)
| Ziven chapter 1 . 1/20/2011
I haven't much to add to what the reviews thus far have already said - his piece was a wonderful one, insightful and thought provoking. I didn't necessarily think that it was sketchy, but I could definitely see that there could have been a larger scale story, and I think that it would have worked out better being a bit more stretched out, especially because I couldn't quite see the Gemshipping. Hints of it were kind of there, but I thought that the Ryou/Yugi and TKB/Atem kind of overshadowed it. The four of them are connected in a circle, but not by a relationship in the sense of what the contest implies.
Other than the Gemshipping being overshadowed, though, you did a very wonderful job on it and I love this idea.
| safa'at keruth chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
This was incredible. I thoroughly enjoyed every minute of it, especially as the tension and suspense built up so well near the end, what with the layering of the flashbacks over what was actually happening. I loved reading the glimpses into Bakura's past with Atem and how that and his vow connect to the present with Yugi and Ryou - the twist at the end where it's revealed that Ryou was actually stealing everything was lovely, as was all the foreshadowing that led up to it.
I loved your portrayal of everyone's characters, the Thief King's and Yugi's in particular. The Thief King is so well-written that you manage to show a semi-compassionate side to him along with his usual half-insanity, and Yugi had a backbone while still not reaching Atem-level. The depiction of Ryou as the calm, educated British person was wonderfully balanced out by his desperation at the end and when the Thief King begins taking over. And I love the concept of the Thief King stealing only in an attempt to restore balance between him and the Pharaoh - it's a very interesting justification, and one that you pulled off really well.
My only bit of concrit is that I think you could have explored the Gemshipping much more - I honestly wouldn't have known this fic was Ryou x Yugi x TKB x Atem if you hadn't mentioned it before. It felt a lot more like TKB/Atem and Yugi/Ryou, with a tiny little hint of TKB/Yugi on the side, not like a 'full circle'... if that makes any sense. xD
But great job - I really, really liked this, and don't be surprised if you get a fave from me in the future - and good luck in the contest (although you honestly don't need it)! :)
| Animom chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
So, I'll start off with a sort of concrit: this deserves a much bigger canvas! The excavation details, the seasoning of local politics, the twists - they're elegant, but much of the narrative felt MUCH too compressed/sketchy. I suspect that could be because you've incubated this idea for so long, that not quite enough of it got from your head to the page. As a reader, I don't especially need giant neon arrows and volumes of exposition, but I feel the story could benefit from being a bit more expansive about certain things: the Yugi/Ryou relationship, the explanation for the watch, the connection between TKB and Ryou. (And in terms of the contest prompt, the TKB/Ryou aspect seemed especially faint to me.)
Having said that, the scenes with TKB and Atem were especially vivid - the modern scenes with those two - just didn't have the same heft.
P.S. Egotistical yet competent Rebecca made me grin.