|Reviews for More than a duty|
| m-chan chapter 6 . 1/26
I really like the story so far but I wanted to point out, that planes don't exist in the Naruto 'verse. Also as Naruto is in the Japanese setting tje names aren't flipped unlike in the west. E. g. Naruto Uzumaki is written correctly Uzumako Naruto in Japanese customs. Kyuubi is also written with 2 u's and "Guy Might's" name os actually Maito Gai.
| Akiyuzu-chan chapter 7 . 4/24/2014
Hey there. :)
While I really like this story so far I noticed that you made a few mistakes, if minor ones.
1. You used a wrong plural form for some japanese words, but actually there is no difference of the words in singular and plural form. For example: one dango, two dango; not dangos.
2. Comma placement is not your forte, you sometimes leave them out.
3. It doesn't happen very often, but you tend to repeat words in your sentences.
I know that english isn't your first language and it's hard to learn new ones you didn't grow up with, but that's what beta-readers are for, maybe you should consider working with one.
Sorry, I hope you don't take offense.
I just thought maybe you'd like a bit of criticism to improve your writing, I know many do.
Anyway, I'm kind of in love with your fanfiction although I've barely read a fifth so far.
Your version of toddler!Naruto is adorable, seriously, he makes me literally squeal and grin at my screen when I'm alone in my room. :D
Also I really like Inari and her bickering with Kakashi, she's one of the few OCs I enjoy reading about.
But this particular chapter, ughhh.. o_o
It's so sad! Thanks to that and the piano music I had playing in the background I was seriously trying not to tear up like a baby, you're really really good at expressing emotion through your writing!
Thanks for taking the time to write all this and maybe even read this review. :)
After all it's been a while since you've written this, I'm not sure if you still read the comments.
If you do have a nice day and thanks again.
| Ghost Reader chapter 19 . 4/2/2014
I am not actually on this chapter yet in the story I think... The chapter I stopped reading might be by chapter 13 or 15, but anway getting to the point. I have to admit I loved reading the story at the beginning, however, eventually the story began to feel overly dragging or too compressed to continue reading.
Not saying I gave up because I didn't like it anymore-nope. It's just a bit hard reading such heavy chunks and seeing the same exact scenes from manga/anime with slight altering to fit the story you are making. Though also personally I feel a bit irked that Kakashi's relationship or love with Naruto wasn't at least protest against from his peers. The Guy and Lee pairing kinda threw me off as well but I somehow tried to accept it.
So I basically tried skipping to the last chapter; the ending was fairly good and I was surprised to see there were mentions ofNaruto getting pregnant while skimming through. Interesting (nods approvingly). All that matters is that they are happy.
| Shadowed Novice chapter 12 . 12/2/2013
-Jaw drops to the floor-
And just like that he admits it to himself? Oh, brother!
| Guest chapter 35 . 10/10/2013
Thank you sooooo much for your time and effort, this happy ending was exactly what my soul craved.
On another note I hope your life is going better and may your dream to become an accomplished author be fulfilled, you deserve it!
| Guest chapter 34 . 10/10/2013
You made me cry - again! At least they are tears of happiness this time, thank you!
| Guest chapter 33 . 10/10/2013
Great chapter even if you went with a fanfiction cliche, but hey your French right? You guys invented the freaking word so meh, okay. I did enjoy it and I'm curious to see if Sasuke gets his just desert.
| Guest chapter 32 . 10/10/2013
Great chapter, I do still hope that Sasuke dies horribly but if you 'save' him from Tobi I guess I'll have to forgive you for all the awesome you have been producing here.
| Guest chapter 31 . 10/10/2013
Great chapter! I loved it! Also, *yay!* another reason to hate the Emo bastard!
| Guest chapter 30 . 10/10/2013
I kinda understand you about that sandwich, it does sound interesting...
Thanks for another great chapter.
| Guest chapter 29 . 10/10/2013
That was so sweet and funny. Thanks for another great chapter!
| Guest chapter 28 . 10/10/2013
Another great chapter, and quite a relief too!
| Guest chapter 27 . 10/10/2013
Heh, now that's typical Naruto!
| Guest chapter 26 . 10/10/2013
Grrr... Cliffhanger-no-jutsu should be labeled a kinjutsu!
| Guest chapter 25 . 10/10/2013
Argh! That was frustrating to read!