Reviews for Twistings
Evaline100 chapter 2 . 1/23/2012
Plx write more
caspianandsusan4ever chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
I think you have some good ideas, but your grammar definetly needs some work. I noticed some random capitalization in some spots, such as capitalizing pronouns and verbs that did not begin the sentence and while you did a great job with exclamation and question marks, periods are very, very important at the end of a sentence. Sometimes i was a little unsure of whether two fragments were meant to go together or not. Oh, and i am really not trying to make you feel bad and this is a very tricky rule i see A LOT but it really sets ur writing apart if you do it well. When someone is speaking and there is a tag at the end ('said Peter, Susan asked, etc.') you need a comma after the last letter of the dialogue and before the quotation mark. I know, confusing. For example:

"Yes, Susan," Ms. Pollen said.

"We better fetch her," said Susan. "You see, she doesn't have time," Peter said.

hope that was helpful! Good ideas and don't give up! Reviews will come;)