... You didn't just end that chapter that way.

You didn't...

Okay, you did.

Love where you're taking this story. A few typos here and there- you might want to check this chapter over- but nothing too noticeable. Keep up the good work!

HOW ARE YOU STOPPING IT THERE AOAIJFOAIJDOFIASODFIADF

*ahem* also wondering if you should change the genre to sci-fi/romance instead or something, given how you seem to have a fondness for technobabble! 3

That last sentence sent my spine tingling. Omg! It was Cloud's mission to kill Seph but...now what's gonna happen next! I'm dying to know! Ahhhhhhh. (This review does not make any sense but I'm too excited to think properly.)

Oooh, intriguing. I'm glad Sephiroth finally got the time travel memo; can't wait to see what he does about it. :)

omg kill order! BY ZACK? guhh. D:

Sephiroth might be irritated by how the babbling around the topic they did in that vid but I found it fascinating, thanks. Outside POVs are the best. Mmh.

Also really enjoyed the interaction with reeve. He's such a nice guy, and I love how well you convey that for all his distracted scientist thing he's also really sharp minded and pretty badass in his own way. And yes, Seph, make friends! You poor abandoned little thing.

This is very interesting, and I like that you've told it from Sephiroth's perspective.

This is an amazing story. It's a very interesting take on the time travel trope. I love that Cloud's teaching Sephiroth to ask questions has lead to Sephiroth getting answers Cloud didn't want him to. Looking forward to more!

Hmmm, the people from the second alt reality showing up is a bit weird, and it damages the narrative structure we had where the problems were focused around Cloud and Sephiroth and the world which created wormholes.

It seems likely though Zack is from somewhere where things in general went rather worse- or perhaps he took Seph killing Aeris rather more personally.

Really enjoying the story; I think that a young, uninsane Sephiroth is cute. Kinds putting him in the inexperienced and hormonal shoes :P I can't help but lol at all the times Cloud is beating him! I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Great story so far! I look forward to the next chapter.

This is an amazing story, I love the idea and how you are writing it.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

See ya soon, hopefully,

SelKar

Wow, that was so great ! Everything is :) Seph's Pov, Mentor Cloud, his influence on Seph, Zack is alive ! and wants to save Angeal (as far as I know), Cloud/Seph, the Wolfhaven data disk and the Lecture that we discover with Seph and so much more I forgot. I don't have words to describe how totally in love I am with this story. 333 Thank you for sharing, I can't wait for more ! _

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Now *that* was an edge-of-your-seat page-turner of a chapter. Very well executed. I love how Sephiroth's only getting the whole story in bits and pieces that confuse and disturb him at the same time. I can't wait to see what happens next, but I think the shit's really going to hit the fan soon.

BTW, I love all the little cultural details you've worked out about how materia works and the other bits and pieces that build the flavor of the world.

Very much love for this story 3

I do wonder how Seph will explain away THAT lecture.