Reviews for Homuculi's Love
Kod fish chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
This is awesome please continue making Lust and Greed Love Romance fanfics.
Spiderboy chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
This is awesome. Please make more Lust and Greed love stories.
Brown Eyed Girl 42 chapter 1 . 10/11/2012
This was just gorgeous.
moka shuzen chapter 1 . 9/29/2012
This is a totally awesome story. Please make mor fanfics.
kosab chapter 1 . 9/27/2012
This is awesome please i'm begging to make many more Lust and Greed love fanfiction stories.
Hog Paxk chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
Love it so much. Please make many more Lust and Greed love fanfic with happy endings.
Bad Dog chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
This is fantastic please I beg of you to make many more Lust and Greed romance fanfiction storys.
Armagedrode chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
This is awesome please tons more Greed and Lust romance fanfics. They are such an amazing pairing.
Monica chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
ASDFGHJKL; THIS WAS SO PRETTY EVEN WITH LIKE 2 SPELLING MISTAKES I LOVED IT SO MUCHjdsksldcndkslj 3
Super Star chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
This is awesome please tons more Greed and Lust romance fanfics.
Violetlight chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
First, the good news. I think that when it comes down to it, you've effectively captured the most important part of erotic fiction, getting the reader to really *feel* what the characters are feeliing.

However, your story is filled with glaring spelling mistakes and random capital letters where no capitals are needed. You need to cool off, look at your story with an analytical eye, and correct these errors. They may seem unimportant, but they distract from the message that you're trying to protray, and in this kind of story, you want no distractions.

Also, it seems rather OOC that *Lust*, of all homunculi, would be this nervous about sex. She's Lust, for Truth's sake! She's not some teenage virgin! Remember who and what the character is, and keep to it. Remember, these are *not* your characters. They belong to Hiromu Arakawa, and if you really want to honour *her* hard work with your fanfiction, be respectful to the original creator and keep her characters in character!

Other than those aspects that need improving, I believe you have a great deal of potential as an erotic writer. Keep practicing! It's the only way you'll get better.
Ivy Valintime chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
Great story please create thousands and thousands more Greed and Lust romance stories.
Austine Powers chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
This is awesome please make many more Lust and Greed romance ,love fanfictions with happy endings were they end up together forever.
Guest chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
Awesome please make lots and lots more Lust and Greed romance fanfics. They are such a perfect couple and totally meant too be. Lust and Greed forever. Please continue making more Lust and Greed romance fanfics.
Sayain chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
Awesome please make lots and lots more Lust and Greed romance fanfics. They are such a perfect couple and totally meant too be. Lust and Greed forever.
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