Reviews for expenisve beauty
Guest chapter 1 . 12/3/2014
Your writing style is good, but you break things up to much and need to check your spelign adn gramer (other wise know as spelling and grammar)
ADeletedUser chapter 1 . 7/30/2013
I've got to say that this story is really interesting, reading only the first chapter I can't wait for the next.
I'm going to continue reading but, great story! x
ElectricSocks chapter 1 . 3/29/2013
Sounds great! But you need to get a Beta for the grammar errors.
LaraQueenOfChaos chapter 1 . 12/30/2012
Pathetic, your OC is a mary suu, your writing style is aweful and do you
Have
To
Start
A
New
Paragraph
Every
Scentence
MonaTheGreat chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
Even the title is misspelled...really?! Come on, at least spell check!
Guest chapter 11 . 8/7/2012
I love this storyline it's so cool! Megan is instantly likeable unlike some other charaxters that are added into a story xx keep it up :)
CaptainOblivious1o0o chapter 1 . 1/15/2012
This is really, really good :3

i loved it, but other than few grammar and spelling mistakes it was A :D
Winterowl312 chapter 1 . 1/13/2012
Your writing style is good, but does every sentence and fragment need to be a new paragraph? Things are meant to be in paragraphs and sentences for a reason - too many fragments makes the story sound broken up and makes it hard to follow, and paragraghs are for when you start writing about a new subject, not every.

Single.

Sentence.

You really have a nice writing style, just please take my advice and don't make it so choppy.

-WInterowl312
swimmer09 chapter 8 . 12/3/2011
plzplzplplz update! this story is amazing and i so wanna read more so keep going!
Mary3 chapter 8 . 9/27/2011
Awesome
KittyGolore85 chapter 8 . 9/20/2011
Love your story
Esmer832 chapter 1 . 9/16/2011
So. Many. Fragments!

Also, fix the title and preview spelling! Please!
Ponylove99 chapter 8 . 9/15/2011
I really love your story, but no offense its more than 4 days since last update.
Animorper chapter 8 . 9/7/2011
Love this story. Well, hope you update it.
Ponylover9595 chapter 8 . 9/4/2011
Ok just promise updating this the story. IT's Awesome.
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