Reviews for Unexpected |
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![]() ![]() About fucking time! omg please tell me they finally have them subdued for good. i dont think i can take any more drama! cant wait 4 more |
![]() ![]() ![]() Couldn't resist that quote huh? Still I wonder if this will end well |
![]() ![]() ![]() Um kind of disappointed Kim didn't put up a fight I know shes injured she just doesn't seem like theperson to runaway especially with shegos life in danger |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg :( can you kill him please... nice update |
![]() ![]() ![]() haa haa i can't believe you put south park in there. but damn, u killed off kenny! i'm glad that one bad guy is down...it's kinda sad that the wegos and mego can't stop their own brother...they've got more numbers ;( update hopefully soon! |
![]() ![]() Man this is beginning to give me a headache. all of team possible can't beat 2 fucking people? & with the help of most of team go? bullshit! somebody needs to go ahead & just punch betty in her eye & be done with her. & i loved the south park reference, but kenny should have watched zombieland, you always gotta double tap & make sure one is to the head. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your writing is fluid very easy to follow this story line very nice style, it's pretty obvious Ron is your least favorite character. Yeah his petty jealousy has caused a lot of harm and he certainly deserves what ever punishment is coming to him. Your post high school Ron seems even more immature and annoying with less fighting skill to the point that you have Kim's little brothers man handling him more severely than those who actually caused Kim and Shego physical harm. Of a matter of fact all the males in this story so far seem to have serious character flaws Ron is a spineless moron, Hego is a megalomaniac Kenny is a jerk, not even Mr Dr P has the trust of his wife to tell him what's going on in his daughter life let alone that she was shot. His weakness as a man becomes proven by the point that his oldest child has been shot but his reaction is to leave her room because he can't deal with the idea of her being gay. He sure shows what his priorities are. Does Kigo have to equate to all male being either sadistic, weak, untrustworthy or just plain buffoons. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I actually like this story comes totally from a different angle and seems to work. My comments are not meant to suggest that this is not a good read this is actually my second go round and I look forward to reading more. you definitely put it up a notch in terms of violence against the good guys so to speak. and I'm totally there with the Kim Possible mantra of thou shall not kill. However Kim and Shego are clearly in a life and death situation, and after rape, mental torture, and being shot the worst that happens to the villains is they all get knock out. You even have Shego accidentally permanently scarring Kim I dare say normal human reaction to a loved one meeting the perpetrators who caused rape and mental torture who clearly desires to murder you would at least get full body 3rd degree burns, broken bones and put on life support. My point being once you add a crime like rape and attempted murder into the equation together with a gun no less you should have to have the punishment fit the crime. who walks away from the rapist of their loved one with just knocking him out especially when he is going for a second round and what type a person walks away from the mastermind of their rape who just shot the woman she loves? I not talking about pure pre-meditated revenge this is in the now during battle for yours and loved ones life and this is Shego who is so wrung out by this she hurt Kim while hallucinated. You have her burn Kim not once but twice but not her rapist and evil sadistic siblings? I just saying come on now... |
![]() ![]() I really wanna smack kim 4 coming cuz now shes a liability. & the dudes need to stop treating shego like shes got some virus or something. |
![]() ![]() ![]() good job. wasn't expecting kim not to recognize shego. nice twist. update soon |
![]() ![]() Uh oh! Have I mentioned that all cliff hangers are evil and should be put to death for making me pace around waiting for the next chapter? Hee Hee but then again that's what makes the stories interesting, the twists and turns, surprises and... even cliff hangers. Lol anyways awesome job. Loved it! P |
![]() ![]() ![]() thanks for the notice...i don't know what happened last night to this chapter. wow, it's kinda sad to see that kim didn't recognize shego. i wonder if she can even fight in her new body...it's not like she has the extra strength and probably reflexes like she did before... GOOD LUCK SHEGO! |
![]() ![]() ![]() A very hard addition, on so many fronts, for all those you have drawn together. You could feel the frustration for each character and what was driving each of them. The shocking moment of Kim's realization of what had truly been done to Sara...really hard hitting and well orchestrated. You have really been rough on these two and I'm hoping that they can get a break in their favor soon! Also hoping that glow is recoverable too...the green goddess needs her glow! |
![]() ![]() ![]() very nice update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay Kim's back in action! Hope Shego is okay |