Reviews for Too Obvious
Hawkcam1996 chapter 4 . 7/25
Good story, but the timeline placement doesn't really make sense. After all, Light was only released because the killing started up again not long after he was locked up(I think it was about a week). In fact, I'm pretty sure it was around the same time he gave up the notebook, and lost his memories. Which brings me to the second reason the timeline placement doesn't make any sense. Light can't get his memories back without touching the Death Note, and it seems he doesn't have the Death Note right now, so he shouldn't have his memories, but you explicitly said that he got his memories back. Anyway, aside from the weird timeline placement(which would be fine if either this was an AU where he never lost his memories or this was after they caught Yotsuba and this new Kira just has a different Death Note, after all, there can be 6 in the human world) this story is pretty good. So I think you should continue it.
V Tsuion chapter 4 . 7/14/2015
This is a fascinating story. The set up still doesn't quite make sense, but everyone else's behavior and interactions make sense and are a lot of fun. I suppose it's a bit late to request a continuation, but I appreciate what's here so far.
Getsunohimesama chapter 4 . 1/6/2014
I'm waiting for my update. (sits back and waits)
Getsunohimesama chapter 2 . 1/6/2014
"Please, for the love of God, tell me I am not paying you!"
Nihya chapter 4 . 11/27/2013
It's a shame to leave this story discontinued.
The idea and character constellation really are promising.
This has to be said even if you won't read it after such a long time.
Serendipital chapter 4 . 4/22/2012
This is great! Everyone seems in character, and how you've fit the two worlds together is absolutely amazing. I only wish you'd update!

Good luck on the next chapter!
WhitePearlReaper chapter 4 . 3/16/2012
I like it -
Nadia Blackrose chapter 3 . 12/6/2011
Awesome work, and your line of thoughts is amazing! Keep it up and up, I'm really excited about this! :)
Nadia Blackrose chapter 2 . 12/6/2011
Wow! I love your writing style and the way you develop this idea. You've connected those two universes in a very unique manner.

Kudos, hope you keep on writing!
Nadia Blackrose chapter 1 . 12/6/2011
He he he, interesting idea. Light and Kaiba share some common traits. Both aloof, arogant and clever, so yeah, it would be really funny to see Kaiba have such a note. :D
Sinik chapter 4 . 7/23/2011
It's Very Good so Far I love it. :3
xxxShi.Ro chapter 4 . 3/9/2011
this story is great! well written and the plot seems interesting too.

can't wait for more! i really do love it.
Peisis chapter 4 . 3/7/2011
Gah! This is awesome. I love the way you wrote the staring contest between Kaiba and L. Hope the see Jou and Yugi soon.
Anonymous chapter 4 . 3/3/2011
Usually I never review stories - all the ones I like usually have had about five people before me saying everything I wanted to say but this story has had only three reviews so far - which is criminal in my opinion - so I just thought I should say that this is very good. Most crossovers spend all their time reiterating the plots of the canon so the other characters can exclaim over the differences - they don't bother with a proper plot or try for more subtle characterisation but you've done all that and more. You make me want to know what's going to happen next and make me feel like the characters are as individual and distinctive as theyt were in canon.

Well done! Please write more soon.
fakescorpion chapter 3 . 2/13/2011
It's getting better and better! Poor Kaiba, it's obvious he didn't like to be at the receiving end (but hopefully he didn't need to get use to it). Still looking forward to the confrontation between Kaiba and L, and Light as well of course. But L gets my personal interest.

A small question though: when did you place this story in the DN series? Is it before L and Light came to know each other as a person rather than a codename or after? Or was it when Light loses his memory and are chained together with L? It'll be great if you could clear it up, thx a bunch (for writting such an interesting story).
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