Reviews for The Mouse of Konoha
Tony McNucklz chapter 12 . 8/21
why would ino stand a chance? naruto had a month of Ankos' borderline abuse combined with Gai's years of physical training. ino has a couple weeks training with her dad. no way he pushed her enough for those results, no way was she motivated enough to work hard enough for those results. maybe she gets a hit or 3, but actually winning? naruto has experience with chakra as well so he should be stronger than someone who can't use it yet as well. no way should she win. not without a lot more time to make up for the training gap between them.
The Micky Mouse chapter 1 . 8/20
I'm gonna guess right here and now that he will be using his sexy no jutsu a lot more often as a distraction just because of what the kunochi said
Tony McNucklz chapter 1 . 8/19
I've never understood ripping the village for having a problem with young naruto. though in truth anyone that knows what he is shouldn't be hating him, they should FEAR him. Gaara's life makes the more sense then naruto's. a jinchurriki is essentially the naruto verse' Nuclear Bomb. and instead of the detonator being guarded by multiple redundancies and safeguards to prevent accidental activation, a tailed beast can potentially be released by a child's temper tantrum. if you knew there was a child in your home town that if someone hurt their feelings the kid could accidently set off a hydrogen bomb, wouldn't you be afraid to be near it? and keep your children away from it? im not saying it's moral to fear and shun a child for something out of its' control, im saying being afraid of something like that is normal, though extremely sad.
KaKashi's Okami chapter 24 . 7/24
I got to ch.24 and was like oh hell, I ran out of chapters. Hope to see an update soon
JEM0013 chapter 24 . 6/30
I know it's been a lil over a year but I hope you continue with your story! I couldn't stop reading, it was just so much fun! Can't wait to see what's going to happen between Sasuke and Naru! Will we see more of Kakashi?
Guest chapter 1 . 6/25
Please update this is really good and I can't wait to find out what happens next
thepkrmgc chapter 6 . 6/22
i take it that naruto is going to try and switch idenitiy's, or is he stuck in his new form?
thepkrmgc chapter 5 . 6/22
in retrospect anko is actually a pretty good teacher, much better than kakashi at the very least
thepkrmgc chapter 4 . 6/22
the humor is great, but you know when to mix in some hard hitting drama for pacing and character development
thepkrmgc chapter 3 . 6/21
props to the chinin for their timely rescue, anko may be amusing but naruto is entirrely too impressionable to hang around her
thepkrmgc chapter 2 . 6/21
props to the nameless chunin teacher, its one heck of a reminder that villages are at a state of constant violence and war
thepkrmgc chapter 1 . 6/21
giving naruto the attention he so desperately desires for being helpful and productive is the sort of thing that changes lives: great work!
Nihatclodra chapter 24 . 6/9
I'm really liking where you're going with this fic, even if I wish the chapters weren't so damn long... honestly, a good sized chapter would be between 7000 and 15000 words, more than that and it gets a bit tedious... also makes it very difficult to pace your reading as there isn't exactly a bookmarking function on this site to mark where you are in a chapter...

And one thing that came to mind randomly in a daydream whilst reading this:

Someone asks Naruto the question "What is the perfect ninja?", expecting an answer like "one who is never seen, heard, or noticed; yet always gets the job done" or something like that... and then Naruto answers like "An Aburame with Uzumaki Chakra Reserves, has Perfect Chakra Control, has the Byakugan, is trained in Jyuuken, is the Jinchuuriki of the Nanabi (Because honestly, an Aburame with the only insectoid Bijuu?) with perfect control over the Bijuu, has mastered all 5 elements, and is specially trained as a SAID expert."

I think the only reasonable reply to that answer would be "... fair enough..."
Nihatclodra chapter 18 . 6/5
Imouto means "Little Sister", I believe you're looking for "Otouto" which means "Little Brother"...
Sylo Corden chapter 22 . 6/5
I hope you have found a publisher for your book, I've done a quick search on Google but couldn't find it but you may have changed the title?
I was looking at publishing some of my own work and came across Solentro, they print books for you, it's not a world wide audience, but if you want to see your work in print or have it printed as an example to publishers then that may help, I've been thinking of printing my fan fic work to give to my RPG team.
I look forward to seeing A Storm Upon a Northern Shore in my local bookstore sometime soon.
Take care until then xxx
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