Reviews for The Mouse of Konoha
a fan of this chapter 1 . 11/9
If you had left it like this the story would be a very good one-shot with the possibility of sequels, I'm glad there are more chapters :D
Hnbutt chapter 18 . 9/14
As soon as i read bagpipe, i just imagined Naruto play Scotland the Brave.
Spartan-A312 chapter 4 . 8/30
Naruto is MUAD'DIB!
Mr.Easy chapter 3 . 8/15
this language whatever that these people of the leaf speaks is horid
Sj1969 chapter 21 . 8/3
please make a sequel this was soooooo good probably the best Naruto fiction I've ever read and definitely the best considering thus was pre academy absolutely amazing
Dragon of Yin and Yang chapter 22 . 3/25
Thank you. As part of my annual "read my favorite fanfics," I came to visit. I still love your story.
wolf77166 chapter 6 . 1/13
sir author ignore those haters send them to suck fifty thousand hectares of penises
KvAT chapter 13 . 1/11
I honestly think that my capabilities of playing pretend is equal now and back then. Obviously doing it was easier when I was a shameless child, but nowadays I honed my acting skills in VRChat.
sgriffin730 chapter 22 . 1/7
this was so great! you are very talented!
PredaconWyvern chapter 6 . 10/15/2022
And with confirmation of the shapeshifting jutsu... Naruto could use shadow clones in a snake henge to manage the more fiddly bits of the Snake style.
Eriktheviking70 chapter 22 . 10/2/2022
A pleasure to reread.
Me And Not You 1001 chapter 9 . 7/27/2022
"bang went his idea of studying human anatomy in more depth if he couldn't have a bunshin or two lay down its ethereal life in the name of science"
This was where Orochimaru went wrong. Good thing Naruto's not following that path.
Videocrazy chapter 22 . 7/16/2022
This was really enjoyable. I can understand stopping; the story kind of meandered and sprawled in scope, but it is a shame. You had fertile ground for things to go in an entirely new direction, and I’d loved to have seen that. For example, would the Chunin Exams really go generally the same way? I doubt Orochimaru would be expecting Konoha to tighten up its security so drastically, and there’s plenty of ways Kabuto could get caught out.

If I had one complaint, it’s the flow. Chapters were extremely long, to the point reaching the end felt like a slog. Paragraphs could be rather large in size, especially in the earlier chapters. Primarily, though, you use way too many commas. You have run-on sentences that can last the entire length of a paragraph. It makes it feel clunky.

Lastly, I wanted to say I really appreciated the smarts and wit that went into this. I was greatly impressed by the brilliance of several ideas, and the humor had me laughing solidly once or twice a chapter at a minimum.
eliasdarklight chapter 22 . 6/11/2022
This was a delight
Zeke Hooper chapter 22 . 5/19/2022
what a great story. was hoping there was a sequel, but there is not.
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