|Reviews for On the Wings of a Dove|
| Eowyniel-Elessar chapter 5 . 5/3/2012
please tell me there is more...
I know you said this chapter hasn't been edited but the only things i picked up were that it is "intimate" not 'interment'.
That's the only thing that drew me away from the story, only because i had to reread the sentence the first time be cause i wasn't sure what you were saying. Other than that, you have a gripping plot line, and i have just spent the last 45 reading your story instead of writing my own, you've taken back to the Twilight world while still letting me wonder what will happen next. There is no problem for me regarding the age isuue, you have explained it clearly and if anyone has a problem with it, then why are they still reading? if you hadn;t explained what the process was then it would be confusing that Jasper (a gentleman of the south) was trying to subdue his 'need' to mate with an eight year old and then again a fifteen year old.
In all a great story qith a wonderful plot... I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE!
| wendy1969 chapter 5 . 4/14/2012
this has been an interesting story so far.
| Krystal chapter 5 . 4/6/2012
This is such a fascinating story, I'm loving it! I know you've probably got a lot on your plate right now-you've got several stories you're working on I'm following, besides any RL stuff-but I hope you get some time to keep working on this. It's such a fresh idea, and you kept it, in my opinion, from getting creepy with the age difference, that it's been a lot of fun to read. I hope you're enjoying writing it.
I can't wait to see how the change goes, and how Bella likes being a mated vamp. I'm also really curious about the other new relationships you're developing, with Em and Peter-those boys deserve some love, too, and I think it's cool Marcus is their mates' father.
please, keep up the good work, and thank you for sharing it with us!
| Lady Ramona chapter 5 . 4/6/2012
| ramonalisa19 chapter 5 . 2/2/2012
i love your story!
very good chapter. hope you update soon
| Sonja Whitlock chapter 5 . 2/1/2012
This is a super fantasy type story. I just finished all five chapter. You even had my toes curling with images of Jasper. Hope you have time to post a new update soon.
| Tee Hill chapter 5 . 1/28/2012
great chapter :)))))))))
| girlcanwrite16 chapter 5 . 1/10/2012
I love this story! Please continue it soon!
| Siobhan Whitlock chapter 5 . 1/9/2012
Great chapter! I love reading the Major :)
| MzPYT4eva chapter 5 . 1/7/2012
I cant wait to read more!
P. S. I love the MAJOR!
| TlynG chapter 5 . 1/7/2012
Yay! You updated! I'm so happy that you didn't forget about and stop this story its one of my favorites... And I can't wait to see what happends next and how the rest of the mating goes...
| NinaTree chapter 5 . 1/6/2012
I liked the foreshadowing in this one, you do a great job of hooking your readers for the next chapter! Can't wait :)
| Princess Mishawaka chapter 5 . 1/6/2012
Oh come on...we have waited so long and now we end this chapter on a cliffie...no real lemon?
Please don't leave us hanging on. I can't wait for Jasper to make love to her. Major would not really be love but lust and sex but Jasper OMG I love him.
| gleek987 chapter 5 . 1/6/2012
please update soon! love the story :D
| TwilightAddict71484 chapter 5 . 1/6/2012
well now...it wasn't all out hot and claiming but its a start...can't wait for the next chapter. post again soon.