Reviews for A Little Mistake
dbzqueens chapter 5 . 12/1/2011
Okay, I see you added quotation marks! Sorry about the first review when I said that, I hadn't read on. Anyways, I give you 2 thumbs up in the suspense department! I can't wait to see what will happen next! Anyways, as you continue to write, just try improving your grammar a bit, use what they teach you at school, and you'll be fine! Can't wait to read more! :)
dbzqueens chapter 1 . 12/1/2011
Okay kid, it looks like you have a good story on your hands. (: By reading your profile, I assume this is one of your first stories, am I right? I would recommend maybe using quotation marks to signify when a person talks. It gets kind of confusing trying to figure out when a person stops talking and when narration begins. Other than that, I think with experience you'll get much better, and I look forward to reading more of your work! :D
Sunbird909 chapter 3 . 5/5/2011
I'm sooo sorry, i didn't notice you added them. Man I'm stupid :( please forgive me
Sunbird909 chapter 5 . 5/5/2011
Great story, but it would have been nice if there were " marks
Ilovemanga chapter 5 . 4/17/2011
I love it. Please write more.
RKF22 chapter 4 . 2/11/2011
great update cant wait for more
PIKACHU chapter 3 . 2/5/2011
You should use quotation marks more, please. " I love the story!
RKF22 chapter 3 . 2/5/2011
great update keep it up
ghostmctavish chapter 3 . 2/5/2011
I dnot like your stroy
ghostmctavish chapter 2 . 2/5/2011
What the fuck are you tring to achive with this povs? I dont get it!
ghostmctavish chapter 1 . 2/5/2011
You should really use "" when someone talks or thinks its hard to read.
maidance chapter 2 . 2/3/2011
:,( i'm so sad. GOHAN! but i want to find out what the others will do! PLEASE write more!
RKF22 chapter 2 . 2/2/2011
great update cant wait for more