Reviews for After the Smoke Clears: The Rewrite
Anjali Konathala chapter 8 . 1/13/2014
no offense..hermione jean granger...btw great
woahitsalice chapter 26 . 6/21/2013
I loved this, I just finished reading and it took me about three days. Although I do have quite a few constructive criticisms. I apologise if they come off mean, I'm not trying to be honest!

1. Lavender Brown - lavender was killed in the final battle by Greyback buuuutt this is your story so if you didn't want her to be killed that's fine too.

2. Hermione - throughout the story whenever you stated her full name you've always said her middle name as being Jane when actually it's Jean. Just wanted to point that one out.

3. Authors notes - authors notes are great at the beginning and the end of stories but I find that interupting a paragraph with authors notes disrupts the flow of the story and you kind of have to go back and re read sometimes to remember what you just read so I would recommend saving everything you have to say until the end of the chapter and then explaining things from there.

4. (Last one I promise) Grammar - in places the wording you used didn't seem to make sense e.g there were words missing, wrong words used, spelling mistakes and spaces missing between words. This obviously happens to a lot of people and is quite common but I would advise that you make sure you've read through the chapter before posting just so it makes it easier to read so we're not guessing what words were actually meant to be there and so on.

Overall this story was fantastic and you certainly filled in the gap between battle and epilogue so very well done for that!

I hope I didn't come across too harsh! Well done! Keep up the good work and I hope you took my advice on board!
Ace of Hate chapter 1 . 3/18/2013
Fucking great start!
Eppai chapter 26 . 9/14/2011
Very well written and believable story.
jesslovessmiles chapter 26 . 8/26/2011
Such a great story :) I'm so glad I came across it :D Well done, it was an awesome read.
atwtlover chapter 26 . 8/9/2011
Loved it!
GreenField chapter 26 . 8/9/2011
I really, really love this story!

Great job, I really enjoyed it :)

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heronlove chapter 26 . 8/7/2011
Great fic! sorry to see it end. I really enjoyed it and will be looking forward to your next project.

Crystal
heronlove chapter 25 . 8/7/2011
Great chapter!

Crystal
heronlove chapter 24 . 8/7/2011
great chapter! I am so happy that they got to Ginny in time to stop her from being raped. I loved Ron's bed side manner.

Crystal
heronlove chapter 23 . 8/7/2011
AHHHHHHHHHH! I hate lavender. I f she had destroyed our best couple, I would have been so mad. I am glad that Minerva helped Ron save his memories.

Crystal
heronlove chapter 22 . 8/7/2011
That was a great chapter! Nice Malfoys takes some getting use to but I am getting there. I love Neville and Luna. I could have sone without Harry and Ginny's house hopping.

I loved Ron and Hermione's visit with Charlie. His girlfriend Sam, she seems nice.I loved the part about the silencing charms. Molly will kill Charlie if she finds out that he let Hermione and Ron share a room. I love reading about Ron and Hermione little sisters. He is so good with them. He should go and spend time with them over the summer. More please!

Crystal
heronlove chapter 21 . 8/7/2011
AHHHHHH! that was the best birthday ever. Ron was such a natural with the birth of the babies. Hermione's parents are so nice. I want more!

Crystal
sjrodgers23 chapter 26 . 8/7/2011
loved the whole story please continue to write more of these story
sjrodgers23 chapter 25 . 8/7/2011
love it so far keep the story coming thank you
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