|Reviews for Scream My Name|
| bookworm4ever81 chapter 1 . 7/4/2012
Super Hott! I know you said it could never happen but I could totally see it happening (thats what AUs are for).
| Takara yume chapter 1 . 3/19/2012
haha epic! love this XDD
| hopelina chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
haha, I love it! :3
| Rita chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
So f**king hot smexy great
| inhx chapter 1 . 3/28/2011
Loved the twist at the end!
And Roxas was hilarious when he tried so desperately not to scream Axel's name, LOL.
| NormaJean Beausoleil chapter 1 . 2/11/2011
totally unrealistic but especially cute! good job!
| LittleLostLamb chapter 1 . 2/5/2011
Really enjoyed reading this story.
It was very enriching, and the sex scene?
| JustCallMe-SebastiansWife chapter 1 . 2/5/2011
Nice story )
| PumpkinLenses chapter 1 . 2/2/2011
HAHAHA AWESOME i loved it :D
| Mtsr chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
Ej:Oh look at the time.
Pshhh loved it.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
fucking WOW XD best story ever
| Dreamy Duskywing chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
*is still giggling* Ahh, Axel is so devious, his method in winning the bed was pure genious! XD I really enjoyed this, it was not PWP, the plot was awesome and the characterization was fab! I must say you've cheered me up tremendously. Congratulations on the birth of your 'baby'! ;) x
| bbb136 chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
ROCKETSHIP-ROMANCE! O.O (imagine that exclamation changing in tone and volume the whole way through please)
It's safe to say those poor unsuspecting thoughts of you being an innocent slasher just got (...) slashed. :P Im jealous now though, your lemon was MMMMMM!
xD So this is one of your unposted oneshots then? It was good, i liked how it had the theme of sex but actually had a fun plot to go with it. You should really keep posting more like this!
But next time try aim to put a lemon out on the weekend please, as I'd just got home from an art day at school and damn did my mind implode! Minds that have spent hours soley on creativity should not read a lemon soon after! ;)
P.S. I aim to reply to your pm soon- though it's kind of the week from hell so don't expect an email as quick as tomorrow or anything.
P.S.S Damn this fic was hot.
| Sundai chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
I spotted a factual error, your line:
"Pulling his fingers out Axel turned his attention to his own erection which he lathered in lube till it was slick and aching, he then opened the yellowed wrapped condom and rolled it down his penis, making sure it was on right."
Lube goes on after the condom otherwise it defeats the purpose of the lube (and you risk the condom sliding off). The way you wrote it basically has Axel taking Roxas dry, which conflicts with the 'considerate lover' that you tried to portray Axel as.
Change or ignore, it's your choice I just thought I'd point it out to you. Good job though, keep up the good work.
| spoony monster chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
I loved the banter between the two of them throughout this story. The only negative I have about it is the way some of the formatting is (which can just be as simple as an upload error from iself; it's happened to me before) where some of the paragraphs are running together, so I would go back and re-space them to make it easier to read.
Your spelling and grammar is good, which is amazing in a sea of of poorly-written smut written by thirteen year old girls.
The sex isn't too overly detailed (which can be an extreme negative in smutfics like this) and the plot and smut complement eachother perfectly, so I wouldn't call it PWP, because there's definitely some plot which I can picture continuing after the story, which is very important when it comes to writing, even if it is just fanfiction.
So overall, I would say congratulations on the amazing oneshot! This is definitely going in my favorites!