|Reviews for 13: Beginnings|
| Shades.of.Peppermint chapter 1 . 2/4/2011
So I know I've told you this before, but I love the way you write Axel - he's a creeper, definitely, but entertaining enough that I don't hate him for it. And as much as I love your OCs, I also really like watching the game characters interact on their own. This does a good job showing how we get from "don't leave, I'll miss you" to boss fight to on Sunset Hill with 'Ansem' and Nami. Who, incidentally, you also did a good job with. Nami is adorable, and my only complaints about 'Ansem' are that you still give him a Keyblade prematurely ("that accursed Keyblade") and that there's not enough of him - and that's more a problem with my sanity than with your story -;
Oh, and I think it was easier to follow with some kind of section break, but that's really the only complaint I'd have. Just, please don't let Axel do anything horrible to Nami?
| TwilightSky15 chapter 1 . 2/4/2011
| NinjaSheik chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
LOVED IT! UPDATE SOON!
P.S: You used a scene from the Final Mix from Kingdom Hearts II, didn't you?