|Reviews for School Spirit|
| Shadow of Flame chapter 9 . 2/26
Great job mixing Dresden's narration style with the Potter world. Great job blending the two Harrys characters for that matter. Is Dresden aware at all of Potter? Or is the dream/connection just one way?
I'm assuming that what Potter's seen of Dresden's life is still pre-Dresden Files, will he ever see some of DF canon? (Assuming, of course, that the dreams come back).
I love your take on Fawkes, and how you've cast Dumbledore as well meaning, but manipulative, sometimes without realizing.
| ALUCARD chapter 6 . 1/27
It is one of the funniest and most interesting story I have ever read. Harry's sarcasm knows no bound. Hehe.
| Xahn777 chapter 9 . 1/22
It's a shane you havent updated in two years. You have the tone down perfectly. I hope youll one day return to this story and finish it.
| Pinefresh chapter 9 . 1/19
AAAAAAAAARRRRRRRGGGGGHHHHHH! GRARGERBELERGER! RRRAAAGGGEEE! WE HATES IT! WE HATES IT FOREVER! This is the best thing I've read in weeks, including several top fics in my favorite fandoms AND rereads from my top ten list! and it hasn't updated in ALMOST FOUR YEARS! I have to put it in my deadfic folder and forget about it FOREVER or I will go mad checking it EVERY GODS-BE-DAMNED DAY! And the worst thing is that you're probably not EVEN AROUND ON THE SITE TO SUFFER MY UTTERLY IMPOTENT WRATH!
| Jonn Wolfe chapter 8 . 1/16
Oh, I do hope you come back to this. It is so sarcastically awesome, I'm not sure how to phrase the spectacular of it. Seriously... come back to this. *gets on knees and grovels*
| UniqueTeen chapter 8 . 12/22/2013
It has been two years since your last update, which makes me believe that this piece of fiction is abandoned, which is a real shame. This story has-or had- a brilliant storyline, and was written in a very Dresden like style, which not many authors get. It is really upsetting that you have abandoned this story, as I enjoyed it emensly, but I hope dear Author if you ever read this that you know that your work of art was appreciated, and I hope that you have a good future, whoever you are.
| entelejent chapter 9 . 12/17/2013
Pretty good. I really like how, instead of simply relying on clichés, the author has sensible explanations and writes them out concisely and at a perfect pace, not hurrying through but not bragging about them and dragging it out.
Above average at keeping the story flowing. There's a single tone throughout, which is good and bad, and it's not just a bunch of highlights over a year. Still, it practically skips over potentially interesting situations and chunks of time. There's also an issue of repeating things short sentences after they're stated.
| HaikenEdge chapter 9 . 12/15/2013
Quite excellent. It's a shame it hasn't been updated in more than two years.
| Rc1212 chapter 9 . 12/10/2013
I look forward to seeing where this goes!
| Dragish chapter 9 . 11/14/2013
Entertaining story, the mixing of the two magic systems is handled well. Characterization is well done. I enjoy the first person style
| Aire5 chapter 4 . 10/19/2013
| Aire5 chapter 3 . 10/19/2013
Love it n.n
Really well written fic and quite engaging hope you complete it some day n.n
| Retric chapter 9 . 10/1/2013
Great story, I think you really nailed a Harry x2 cross. And I hope you eventually pick this up again. Still, thanks for posting this much
| Nauro chapter 9 . 9/5/2013
Ah, one of the stories, where it has been a long while since an update.
I actually enjoyed the writing style, probably even too much than I should have. It just rang too close to Dresden Files, for it not to be to my liking. As I also enjoy a well written first person, I enjoyed it from that aspect.
The delivery, thus, gets full marks.
Everything else... I don't know. I like the overarching plot in a sense that is heading for different directions than Harry's canon, and even if it is threading a bit too close for a canon rehash, I can't say that I have escaped that myself, so a degree of this is appropriate enough.
Then, there's the stupid. For some reason, you have this good story, probably even bordering on great.
And what do you do? You put in the worst ideas of the Harry Potter fandom in there.
At the very least, you tried to handle them decently.
The friendly goblins weren't as friendly, but the inheritance was large enough to raise warning flags. You'd think something as important would have been mentioned by Rowling. And yes, you stopped before crossing the line, declaring Harry a lord and doing all manner of stupid things to raise his supposed worth. But it still lead to Potter resources, Family Grimoires and investments.
You barely missed the emancipation landmine, and then, stepped right into the custom made wand. You'd think Olivander would combine the cores all the time, if that was a better way, but whatever. Also - magical cores. You get points for not having comparative strengths and all that 'Stupid', and actually explaining it as a difference of Dresdenverse and Potterverse magics - one is from your will, and the other is from your magical core thing. Alright, I said to myself, I'll stay for a while longer.
Then, finally, you move further to the plot, not after having Harry buying an awesome trunk that could as well have been removed and nothing would have changed, but I digress.
It's me reading through my clenched teeth, because I'm lowering my expectations by the minute, and am just along the ride for the plot - and questions of how it might actually involve Dresden directly.
And you improve. A bit. There's a weird adult conversation with Hermione (even if only one Harry is 23-ish, Hermione, well, isn't), but it goes to be of quality again.
The school year develops interestingly, even as Harry does things differently. There's a distinct lack of any Ravenclaw acquaintances beside Hermione, even if it makes some sense, and the troll incident proceeds well.
The first soulgaze as a Potter ir goood and powerful example of your writing at the height.
And then, there's this chapter.
You have Fawkes highlight that Dumbledore isn't bad. To show that there is a reason for him, and there's wisdom in this old colorblind-Gandalf, if you will. And then, you have Albus throw around the Greater Good in conversation. NO. Just no.
In a way, I'm glad it happened - I'm not as regretful for not seeing the story continue, as I could have been.
Even if I liked the following scene at the mirror of Erised, the baggage of the previous conversation still left a stained feeling in my soul.
All in all, I don't regret having read the story. It was a fun experience, nothing too grand, but everything fitting to it's places. Even the stupid ideas were developed in some ways, to not feel as stupid as they originally were, but you would have gotten a heaps better story if you had taken time to cut them all out.
| Guest chapter 9 . 8/9/2013
This has a really great set up, it is well written, fun to read, all in all the start of something special yet it look like a lost fan-fiction doom to be left incomplete for all time what a pity