|Reviews for I've Had a Little Bit Too Much|
| WolfPacFaan chapter 9 . 10/19/2011
Hmm. interesting, i wonder who's Sora's dad is... Actually i really wouldnt mind know who his dad is...
And the only way for that to happen is if you UPDATE!, so please update soon... i want to see who you put Sora's dad as...
| Akemi713 chapter 9 . 10/18/2011
Poor poor Sora!
Dude, what's gonna happen? I wanna know! Please update soon!
and yes, we still love you! lol
so please update!
| Dustin chapter 9 . 7/28/2011
Hope everything turns out okay...*hugs* yes I realize I'm a total stranger...
| TamashiiWolf chapter 9 . 7/24/2011
Man I love this story! And normally I don't like reading Sora/Riku stories I perfer Axel/Roxas. But this is just awesome! I hope that you really continue this and write a happy chapter that something good happens to them so it will go and happen to you! XD LOL sad part is it happens to me with dreams...oh well my brain is mess up...But keep writing I love it and I hope you don't stop!
| GoalieGirl30 chapter 8 . 7/1/2011
i didn't understand that chapter... O.o
| Inspirerespire chapter 8 . 6/30/2011
The chapter could of been a little longer, but, other than that 3 I loved it. Goddesses, I really want to know what happens next! O: Curse these cliffhangers!
I hope you write more chapters, I look forward to reading the rest 33
| unseenflaire chapter 8 . 6/29/2011
what did he take O,O i wants it. . .jk i'd rather not end up forgetting a good day. . .or get lost. . .great story. . .bad cliffy D:
CHUT CANT KILL SORA /cries
| Andthensome14 chapter 6 . 6/5/2011
Oh my gosh I just love this story. I can't wait to see rikus dads reaction when they see their grandson XD
| GothEmoKid chapter 6 . 5/26/2011
Aww! I just found this today and was so hoping for another chapter! I love it! I will be faithfully awaiting another update. I don't think that your "issues" (meaning grammar and spelling) are too bad, though I am glad you found a beta. I like the fact that I can see where the story is going and I'm all worked up about not having another chapter to read. In the first chapters I wasn't sure I was going to like it, but now I want more! There are a lot of factors that make this story so intriguing, like how Sora at first thinks Riku is amazingly hot and whatnot, then thinks he's a total bastard for taking his first "kiss," and then falls in love with him again. BTW what was the song by Breathe Carolina in ch. 3 (I think it was 3)? I also think its kinda funny how Riku is partners with Ventas (who looks identical to Roxas) as his baby partner. My only thought is that, since he's turned on by Roxas, and that Roxas looks identical to Ventus, wouldn't that mean that he's turned on by Ventus too? I don't know, maybe I'm over analyzing the situation again...
Can't wait for the next chapter! Please make it longer, please!
| GoalieGirl30 chapter 5 . 5/20/2011
when you were talking about the leftovers you said frig insted of fridge
| Gxmwp-Arisa chapter 5 . 4/15/2011
plz dont take a long time 2 update and great chap!
| 5sidedsquare chapter 4 . 3/22/2011
Cute, so far.
HOWEVER: Excessive description. It's nice to read, for a time, but it gets boring after the third sentence. It's nice to know how the coffee tastes and smells, but knowing how it swirled and eddied in the Styrofoam cup is unnecessary.(I realize you never said anything about coffee, but that's just my example. Pardon me for being confusing, eheh.)
"She took that moment to shine her own sincere and warm orbs at me." - ? -[shine her own sincere and warm orbs]- that's a bit much. Descriptions like that are overused, and often overdone. Eye descriptions are clichéd thus. Painful.
"Well, to that I have no comment, because I can't find them." -This is an example of where you need to make a decision. The story has been, it seems, in past tense so far. The entire paragraph that this sentence was in seemed to be in the present tense. It's a simple mistake, but jarring when reading the whole thing through in one go.
Your change in P.O.V where Sora ran into the tree was unnecessary.
I notice that Sora doesn't pay much attention to when people talk, haha.
Riku also doesn't seem to know what to say a lot.
Sorry, I reviewed this as I read. Uuh. Now what to say? I think I'm done. Nothing wrong but minor pet peeves of mine, and, really, they probably don't need fixing at all since I'm just obsessive about certain aspects of writing.
Excellently cute, I will say. As many things as I may have complained about, I really am looking forward to the next update/chapter thing. Such a story can only get better, I believe, unless you go on for too many chapters.
Keep up the good work,
-5sidedsquare the obsessive compulsive.
| Akemi713 chapter 4 . 3/18/2011
Poor Riku, he saves Sora's life and gets yelled at in return. Lol I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Sora-Hayashi chapter 3 . 2/20/2011
Me likes the story D
By the way, nice write-technic or how is it called _
It surely is written with humor _
And I like that D
So next chapter for me please? 3
| Gxmwp-Arisa chapter 3 . 2/19/2011