|Reviews for Pirates vs Ninjas: Battles of Love and Will|
| OnePieceFan2 chapter 1 . 6/27/2013
This was interesting but you spelled degrees wrong.
There was nothing else I found but good job!
| Sevenar chapter 5 . 5/3/2013
I am enjoying this immensley, not just for the accurate characterization but the idea itself is very interesting. You don't downplay or try to even out the strengths between the two series, especially since this is after the OP timeskip the Straw Hats outclass most of the people in Naruto (which I think is before the Pein arc in this right?) If I had any criticisms to give it would be that the overall grammar could be improved, and though this has listed pairings in the summary I'd recommend you don't focus on that for the Straw Hats, since they are like a family and many of them have ambitions that go beyond romance or haven't had the time throughout their lives to focus on it. I hope to see some of where Franky is since we haven't seen him at all lately.
| Anonymous chapter 5 . 4/1/2013
Really like this story please continue! :)
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/26/2013
can't wait to read more :)
| erching chapter 5 . 11/5/2012
i deffinetly like this i hope you'll continue
| Amyethious chapter 5 . 11/3/2012
| StarWatcher007 chapter 5 . 11/1/2012
Amazing! Can't wait for the next chapter!
| SkyeZ chapter 5 . 10/3/2012
Yes! Amazing! Love it:) cant wait for more
| ImagineBreaker7 chapter 5 . 10/2/2012
The story is pretty good I am looking forward to the next chapter
| archsage328 chapter 5 . 10/2/2012
People really need to stop underestimating Usopp, including himself. And the fight between Sanji and Rock Lee? I can't tell you how epic that was. But you forgot to have the weights make a huge crash when he took them off. But now that he's drunk, absolutely nothing is safe from him. Nice to see Luffy making such good friends with Naruto and Hinata. But now I'm curious what would happen if Naruto met Brook. Naruto doesn't seem to have that much of a stomach for the otherworldly, but ironically neither does Brook! Not to mention he doesn't have a stomach! Yohohohoho!
And yeah, Rock Lee is not only powerful, but respectful. He's got his quirks, but he's so likable because of them and his other characteristics. Thing is, that's why I'm on the fence about how I feel in regards to the new Naruto Spin-off: Rock Lee and his Ninja Pals. It's got plenty of genuinely hilarious moments (the segment where the 3 members of Team Gai are given bombs that will go off if they perform one of their running gags or in one case stop performing it had me roaring like a lunatic), and having my favorite Naruto character as the star of the show is a welcome bonus. But the quirkiness of him and Gai are blown to such crazy proportions that they can sometimes be pretty awkward or downright uncomfortable. And Rock Lee's feelings for Sakura? Sometimes he resembles a perverted and obsessive stalker in this show. *sigh* Can you blame me for feeling conflicted?
| Hallo chapter 5 . 10/1/2012
Ah, can't wait for the next chapter, can't wait.
| Ace Trainer Alicia chapter 5 . 10/1/2012
Ace Trainer Alicia reporting for duty, as promised!
Let's get the negative criticisms out of the way first-your weakest area is clearly mechanics. Although your spelling is good save for the occasional typo and even entire words missing from sentences, your punctuation needs a lot of work, especially your comma usage. Commas ALWAYS go at the end of a line of dialogue, unless it is an exclamation, a question, or is not followed by a dialogue tag (in which case you would use a period).
"Oh stop complaining" said Ino placing her hands on her hips.
"Oh, stop complaining," said Ino, placing her hands on her hips.
I recommend getting a beta to help you with those errors. Also, don't put author's notes in the middle of the text or author's notes as chapters; they're distracting-and please don't use chatspeak, ever. I know the earlier chapters were written quite some time back, but chatspeak is a surefire way to convince people you aren't trying to write well.
I personally don't care for the gratuitous Japanese, either. It feels too gratuitous, especially from the OP characters, and no translation is given in the author's notes. If you wish to use Japanese phrases, don't overdo it, and make sure you include the translations in the end author's notes.
That being said-you've certainly captured my interest. I did enjoy seeing how the Straw Hats and the shinobi interacted differently. The scene between Zoro and Sasuke was particularly satisfying-it put a smile on my face. Your Gameshark won't save you now, Sasuke! And it seems like Brook has opened the floodgates for quite a bit of misunderstanding-fueled conflict. How long will the two casts be fighting for, and when will they all realize a misunderstanding occurred? What trouble will everyone get into next?
I admit I don't know the OP cast very well, but I do like all of the Straw Hats and how you're writing them from what I've seen. Their powers are also awesome, and contrast nicely with the shinobi's spells. I'm really hoping they all meet up again soon. And I do wonder how all the planned pairs are going to manifest.
Overall, a solid start, interesting premise and execution, and good characterization-but it needs a bit of polish and a beta before it'll truly shine. Keep up the good work and the good ideas-I'm off to finish reading some of your other work.
Ace Trainer Alicia
| Rosii chapter 5 . 10/1/2012
:O wow this is my first time reading a crossover onepiecexnaruto! i i'm really looking forward to it! :D
love the first chapters! can't wait till the next one :')
| Rose Tiger chapter 5 . 10/1/2012
| BOBOBOBO chapter 5 . 9/30/2012
Hmm, Sanji had more trouble with Lee then i thought He would.
I suppose someone is going to inform Naruto about a skeleton swordsman, and Luffy being the genius that He is, will tell them that it's Brook... I can't wait!.
Keep up the good work!.