Reviews for Young Love
marina chapter 10 . 10/12/2016
OMG... I wish I could be in one of your puppy love storys I would love for seth to fall for me. UH COULD I BE IN ONE OF YOUR PUPPY LOVE STORYS PLESE! it would be great
marina chapter 1 . 10/12/2016
hi my name is marina i think this story is great i am reading for the 2 thime
MikoWhiteFang chapter 14 . 9/4/2016
TSCxHG chapter 14 . 8/5/2015
This is really cute! I love it, please update again soon!
Cosmic Daeva chapter 7 . 6/8/2015
This is a harsh critique: why a 9 year old. This is obviously something you've had fantasies about but NINE that's pediphilic (aka not good). Your writing style needs some work your making every character too Mary and Gary Sue. The only conflict is that the love intrests are nine and seventeen which I've said before is pediphilic. You're writing he make lead like he wants to fuck a child (which is why I bring up the pedohilia remark) and he keeps saying "he'd never hurt his imprint" like A peodphile would say "I'd never hurt the child I love" or whatever but that's what it sounds like. I understand you're like 12 because this is how a 12 year old writes and edits, btw, your beta misses crucial grammar and spelling error made throughout the way posted chapter which makes it very hard to read and take seriously which I can't anyway because your trying to make a ridiculous age gaps look romantic instead of creepy. And before you got and say it's Stephanie Meyer cannon that a 14 year old falls in love with a 2 year old. LET ME MAKE THIS CLEAR: it is also Smeyer cannon that a hundred and seven year old wants to have sexy with a sixteen year old, that's creepy because he's literally older than her I doesn't matter that he looks young it matters because he is old and she's young. Smeyers main claim to fame in these books is Mary and Gary Sue vaguely pediphilic actions, because let's face it when a sexy-old-as-balls-vampire-boy wants to LITERALLY fuck you until you pass out because you're a manic-pixie-one-of-kind-dream-girl that's not romance that's porn. ADVICE TO FIX: first what you want to do is start Nami out at her young age, then Paul or whatever babysits and the male lead is involved they imprint and then add fluff, he asks her how what her favorite candy she says twinkles and the chapter ends with him babysitting and them sharing a Twinkie. Then each chapter she's aged up a war filled with fluff: he takes her to the bonfire they make smores his falls on ground she shares hers/ they got to the beach and make sandcastle a because the water is too cold, etc) until she's 18 and they kiss and the story ends. Happily ever after true love. Your main problem is you're keeping her young but writing this as if she were older.
Louise123 chapter 14 . 1/16/2015
I really love this story sooooo much ! So could you update it sonner please
Guest chapter 14 . 10/1/2014
cmon chapter 14 this is a great story
dhvdnkbabio chapter 14 . 7/19/2014
No it's fine please update though before I read this story I was actually thinking of doing something like htis except with an 11 year old.
Claire chapter 2 . 7/5/2014
Love it! Werewolves are fun.
Megan chapter 13 . 6/21/2014
this id very sweet, i like it very much. i hope u write more... NOW... ASAP DUDE! ;)
smileynight chapter 13 . 6/3/2014
love it!
wolf-girl-only-in-my-dreams chapter 13 . 3/5/2014
Please update.
LahotesGirlxX chapter 13 . 3/4/2014
This chapter really made my day ! Especially because of Seth ! I laughed so hard At that part! Update soon
Sienna246 chapter 13 . 12/15/2013
Please update again soon! This is even better than the QuilxClaire ideas!
Sportlover098 chapter 13 . 6/22/2013
Please update really good story so far!
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