Reviews for Separated Destinies
SeeSea21 chapter 6 . 7/10/2013
any more?
TeddyBearStuffings chapter 6 . 6/23/2013
Hi there!
i really like this story
i just finished reading chapter 6 and an idea came to me:
what if allen and lenalee (if they're still alive) found out their kids were put for treason or wateva u call it and came back to help them or somethin...
then there's this huge reunion and... yea...
but anywayz LUV THE STORY!
Arbitually chapter 6 . 5/9/2013
I just started reading this and I have to say... FANTASTIC! I eagerly a wait your next update, and hopefully it won't be for a year. Till then, see ya!
XxThe-Crest-Of-AnubisxX chapter 6 . 5/9/2013
(۳Д)۳ aaaahhhhh...another cliffie :'(
And I've been waiting for you to update it :'(
Anyway good luck on your next chapter and please...please...long chapter
Thank you :)
FallenKing47 chapter 5 . 5/22/2012
Im so happy! TT this chapter is great ! Hope u can update soon! Thanks
TheSapphireRose chapter 5 . 3/25/2012
Finally an update! I love this story, I can't wait for an update. Keep up the good work!
LightMyBulb chapter 5 . 3/23/2012
Yay an update! :D
Hellocloser chapter 5 . 3/23/2012
Yay for updates! This is starting to get pretty intense. I can't wait for a family reunion, though... I hope Lenalee and Allen show up soon~
UsuiXMisakilover chapter 4 . 1/11/2012
Update please!
Hellocloser chapter 4 . 12/28/2011
Ahh I like this plot! Allen and Lenalee saying goodbye to everyone made me teary. And I would definitely beta for you if you still need.
LightMyBulb chapter 4 . 12/16/2011
UPDATE PLEASE! :DDDDD and yay Kanda! :)
LightMyBulb chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
I love it so far! :) But Allen's hair turned white from shock; it's not genetic so it can't be passed on to his children...
knightlychika chapter 4 . 9/24/2011
Yay update :D

First, with the beta:

-"I am Sigyn. *new paragraph* And they are my fellow comrades...": The second paragraph can go right after Sigyn introducing herself without making a new paragraph. Also, the "they" can be turned into "these" to show that the others are with her.

-After the sentence "The inspector sighed" I think you forgot to put quotation marks around the rest of the paragraph

-He silently prayed that won't happen: Changing out "won't" with "wouldn't" makes it past tense

-She almost memorized who lived in here, but unfortunately, she can't remember which rooms they live in: Changing "can't" to "couldn't" and "live" to "lived" will make those past tense

-"You on the other hand shouldn't get too rusty with you kicks.": Just put an "r" on the end of "you" to show possession

-"There you go again with you fail quoting": Again, just make "you" "your"

-"And I'll have one of the biggest smile!-": Add an "s" to the end of smile

-Oh how she hated and loved flashbacks at the same time: needs period at the end

-The girl looked like their age: It would make more sense to change the "looked like" to "looked to be"

-He was an albino: I think the phrase "He was white" would work better, because albinos have pink eyes, and is generally used more as a word describing a condition rather than skin color

-Judging by their look: Add "s" to "look"

-No, she can't feel like this: "couldn't" would work better here, because "can't" is present tense

-Or maybe she has Obsessive Compulsive Disorder: Change "has" to "had"

-The sweet and caring girl was pretty and was also the one who can keep people on their leash: Change "can" to "could"

-"I am Sigyn, they are my comrades": Change "they" to "these" and add an "and" after the comma to connect the sentences

-"She's already got enough men in her lives": This time change "lives" to "life"

-"Lena, I do not certainly have a sister complex": It'll sound better if you put the "certainly" in front of the "do not"

-Wow, this girl has a very long name: Change the "has" to "had"

-"I understand Sigyn, Alfred always get into trouble so I am not shocked": Add an "s" to the end of "get"

All-in-all, that's really good _ A lot of my classmates jumble up tense consistency and other simple things, and (supposedly) English is their first language *facepalm*

As for the chapter itself, I really liked it :) Glad to see more of Alex'a sister complex XD And where do you come up with these names like Maricar and Sigyn? They're so cool :D

As for my weirdest habit, I can watch the same TV show or movie over and over until I have it all but memorized ; Drives my sister crazy XD
Spider's Thread chapter 3 . 9/16/2011
This story is so sad i wanna know what happens next.
TheLoneAce chapter 3 . 6/15/2011
plz update and r lenalee and allen coming back?
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