Reviews for Naruto Mysterious Power
Blackfire644 chapter 6 . 7/11/2014
I love your OC jutsu and Techniques they are awesome.
Guest chapter 7 . 6/30/2014
When I first tried this fic i hated it...it has too much bashing and quite irritating...
But when when i read some chapters again today I hate ot even more now
I hope you write something worth reading in the future
matthewrister chapter 44 . 6/29/2014
My Neighbor Totoro reference lol
onlytoask chapter 1 . 6/25/2014
Here are two pieces of advice I have from just the first minute of reading this: don't bash and don't put AN's in the middle of the chapter. Bashing makes you look like a pathetic manchild with unresolved anger issues against fictional characters, in this case a 12 year old boy and girl. There is not a single case in which bashing helps a story or in any way makes it better. That doesn't mean you suddenly have to erase every negative quality of the characters, but bashing is a clear sign of a bad author and should be avoided completely. AN's should be kept strictly to before and after a chapter, not in the middle. It interrupts the story and jars the reader. Anything you would want to say there should be able to be explained within the story itself. If it can't it doesn't belong there anyway, like your AN talking about Harry Potter, and should be kept until the end. Unfortunately, that is all the advice I will be able to give because I could not force myself to read very much of this atrocious example of literature. I hope time and practiced has advanced your ability to write.
JasonEpsilon725 chapter 83 . 6/22/2014
Could I do an MST of this fic?
IamWhatIamBaby chapter 50 . 6/18/2014
Killer Bee is a perv.
Watch the episode where Naruto n Bee went against Edo Tensei jinchurikis. Or the episode where Bee rappes about his preference.
Hehehe chapter 2 . 6/8/2014
Lol, patented sexy jutsu. Someone else had to have commented on this. It's too good not to.
forgotten passwo chapter 61 . 6/2/2014
Huh. So taisune is naruto like I thought.
nights decent chapter 77 . 5/9/2014
I had an idea for an alternate ending using my vampire king characters and would you mind adding it in your store as an extra little bit? Of not them...meh I'll use it as inspiration for future fight/timetravel scenes :p
nights decent chapter 44 . 5/8/2014
To I'm typing a grim dark naruto vampire story check it out no gayness just slightly evil naruto with no morals :) beautiful beautiful evil
noirekitsune chapter 9 . 4/15/2014
how does the twister absorb fire when you said its made of WATER and lightning?
wouldn't the water put it out?

noirekitsune
Guest chapter 54 . 3/31/2014
I'd like to say the story is good but i couldn't read unless completed due to so short chapters and also set serindipity shut up u clearly enjoy being a b***h u cant tell if a storys good from the intro you can only tell if it is the kind of story u enjoy (eg dark naruto or light naruto) ... Any way storys good i plan on reading any of your other naruto fanfictions after this one
Guest chapter 11 . 3/30/2014
Chapter 11 hints at naruto getting renningan 0.o
zaber999 chapter 51 . 3/21/2014
Do you rember witch fic had dark naruto break the sunset of doom with his KI it sounds like one I would love to read
TheOldNinja chapter 4 . 3/14/2014
occasional yahoo? .com
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