|Reviews for Pupa Pan Pie|
| Obvious Ghost chapter 1 . 1/4/2014
This is great. At first, I thought you needed more description and stuff, but the dialogue made up for it by being hilarious and perfect.
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 9/18/2013
"Fly, motherfucking Pupa pan pie, fly!" Bwahahahahaha! This fic is absolutely hilarious!
| Lord Anarchy 888 chapter 1 . 7/10/2013
OH MY GOG! this is totally a Gamzee thing to do! "Fly mother fucker fly!"
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
This was pretty cute! Good job!
And to Farla: rude.
| Randomstrike chapter 1 . 10/4/2012
I can find the words to describe how much I love this :o)
| WhimsicalShmoo chapter 1 . 11/28/2011
xD Nice story! Poor Tavvy...people keep shoving him off stuff. That /can't/ be good for his legs...
| fayfan chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
O.M.G. LOL XD But poor Travos! What happened afterwards? Could you possibly write a sequel chappie to this? :3 Please? X3
| Adorabloodthirsty chapter 1 . 8/17/2011
Oh my gosh this is so adorable. I love them. Thank you :D
| kopycat101 chapter 1 . 7/14/2011
I found this hilarious. Poor Tavros.
| Farla chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
[although he could feel the metal parts digging into the gimpy parts of his body, he couldn't actually feel them. ]
What on earth does that mean? Also, "gimpy"? Really?
[The clown proved to be far better at popping wheelies with the strange device than trying to balance atop that stupid unicycle of his, and the long-horned troll ]
Please don't use irrelevant epithets.
[Then he wouldn't have to worry about his legs being crippled and gimpy and utterly useless.]
You seem to be using pretty much every word you can think of but "paralyzed", which is the correct one.
...oh jesus really? Gamzee took his wheelchair to force him to sit there and chat about feelings until Gamzee's satisfied? That's not cute or caring, that's incredibly controlling and fucked up.
...and now he's throwing stuff at Tavros to force Tavros to realize he's good at dodging. You know, this is basically what Vriska does to him. If this kind of thing was at all something that was helpful to Tavros as opposed to abusive, he wouldn't be paralyzed right now.
And now he's grabbed the chair and is wheeling Tavros somewhere. You know, I just scrolled up to check the genre in the hopes you're aware of this and it's meant to be creepy and messed up, and hey, Humor/Friendship. Guess not. And now he's sending Tavros flying out of the chair, which I guess is really funny?
Gamzee isn't a crazy asshole when from the slime, he's stoned and relaxed all the time, so this is pretty OOC.
| demisemiquav3r chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
oh no! ahahhaa gamzee is completely all over the place! i love it
| Elkian chapter 1 . 2/27/2011
XD okay, that was hilarious.
| XxXDark-LightxXx chapter 1 . 2/25/2011
BEST FANFIC EVER. I loved it~
| you know chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
.. I was honestly expecting some cheesy farfetched ending involving actual flying :'D
But this ending was so much better 3
| gh0sty chapter 1 . 2/13/2011
hahahaha oh my god, this was so cute and fun and just fjdksfdjks. It's nice to see friendly fics between them, and this was really good! (: