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| Guest chapter 1 . 4/18/2013
This whole thing moves entirely too fast. I'd suggest slowing down and spacing better. There's a lot of mistakes so proofreading would help as well. Best of luck.
| WithhopesupHIGHandheadsdownLOW chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
wow. its really good, but you could of "layered" it diffrently i geuss? like in stead of
It could be:
"I was doing
I had no
Just a suggestion :D
| InnocenceOnPaper chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
It's alright for a beginner. I suggest using different patterns and striving for better use of descriptives. Keep Writing!