Reviews for Fireside
Guest chapter 1 . 1/11
This is fabulous.
DragonDamsel chapter 1 . 12/20/2016
This is a very interesting premise and the last line is just a shot straight to the heart. Danette's voice is so clear and it's amazing how you could give out so many enticing clues and context through this structure. Really amazingly written, I am getting a lot of Soul Nomad thoughts and feels now. It's really true that Revya made his choices, but I got to agree with Danette on how the whole Devourlord business would never happened without Virtuous' schemes.

Sure, Revya could chose differently but the fate of the world shouldn't depended on an unprepared and unwilling teenager to begin with. Even from pragmatic point of view, Virtuous spend too much time and preparation on counter measures to subdue Revya if things goes south (measures that ended up not being enough anyway), and not nearly enough dedication on preparing/shaping Revya into someone who would not snapped under the unwanted mantle of world saving.

Normally I couldn't like Danette not even in Demon path where she prove and show herself to be someone who really love Revya, who actually is devoted and loyal even when the best friend she has known is now certified evil. It's just way too late to matter, to show that she care when Revya is beyond caring... But well this fic is so well written I actually appreciate Danette .
The Genius Mage chapter 1 . 5/25/2011
Oh wow I really like this. Fantastic job! It's really deep, I'm always interested in Soul Nomad stuff.
Me chapter 1 . 4/25/2011
last line /3
Rayless Night chapter 1 . 3/4/2011
I love this structure - just Danette talking. You did a great job catching her playfulness and angry indignation, and the monologue is pretty natural and believable.

Very interesting setup. I'm not sure who the child's mother is - Shauna's my guess, in some alternate continuity where she escapes - but I like the idea of Virtuous holding onto the onyx blade and not being above dumping it on some other hero in the making. Poor kid. Depending on what being canned up in a sword has done to Revya, he and Danette could practically be the kid's shoulder devil and angel.

Interesting wrinkle at the ending - Danette saying Revya never would have gone bad if Virtuous hadn't manipulated him. It's ironic because the reader knows better - Revya doesn't have to turn evil, there is a choice. Even after all the horror of the Demon Path, Danette's still optimistic and protective - and still has blind spots. It really makes me wonder if her loyalty to Revya is justified.

Nice work. This oneshot stands on its own, but it would also work well in a larger story.

Crit:

"She hasn't done a good thing for a [single] person"

"graduation to adulthood [was] getting possessed by a walking apocalypse" - great line, by the way

I feel like I wanted things more fleshed out. Like - why is the kid traipsing around with the sword? Who was the mother? How does the kid feel about his/her father? What sort of goals does the kid have? And even little things like what did the kid say that prompted "Don't put words in my mouth" and "That's not what I said"? Granted, it's hard to include lots of details in a structure like this, but the setup feels a bit flimsy without some of this key information.
Addok chapter 1 . 2/20/2011
Nice! I like how we only get one side of the conversation, leaving the rest up to the reader.
Iceblocks chapter 1 . 2/11/2011
This is really good, you captured Danette's character perfectly and gave us a little information about the aftermath of Devourlord!Revya'a actions. But who is the mother?

PS. This story is already unique if only because it is the only Soul Nomad fic with a male Revya