5/10 The Story is very slow.

Now I understand that I'm 7 years late, but I have to comment. That was the most amazing description of a lightsaber fight I've ever read. Although I disagree with how it ended. While Luke is more agile and has a better raw Force connection due to Vader's injuries, Vader would win essentially every duel against a 16 year old Luke. Vader is undoubtedly a better Force user and duelist at this point. Anakin during RotS would beat this Luke, and Vader 16 years later is a good deal stronger than Anakin. I don't know if you are included in this list, but I feel as if a lot of people think that Vader was always weaker after RotS. If Vader had top of the line cybernetics and if his suit wasn't extremely sensitive to Force lightning, there's a very good chance that he would be able to beat Sidious in single combat.

This story is so well done I just keep coming back to it. Starting my 3rd read through now...

holy shit this is so good

Oof. Great story. Not as viscerally satisfying as your previous trilogy, but given the premise, how could it have been? The addiction and abuse was deftly handled, and you've polished your prose and surpassed some frankly bizarre obsessions with certain iconography and turns of phrase- I was worried that blue eyed boy was gonna be the next wolf or mismatched eyes but nope, most of your poetic excess was left to fight scenes. Moving onto the sequel immediately.

That was awesomely epic. Thanks! Looking forward to the sequel, and trying to predict where the villain would be coming from...

I like the more Vader development a lot-I might even linger a little longer on his past with Padme, but I am a sap. I wasn't expecting g Han to contact him, but it's one of those plot moments that locks into place really, really well-it unexpected as it is, it also seems obvious when it happens. the best way out, the continuation of the epic...

wow, that was a great chapter. I love the way the pieces came together about Luke's past, and the horrible choice-and his emotions. You've done a great job of bringing the narrator into his head.

I don't think it's easy to write real tragedy well-it can get too histronic-but I never felt that here. This seemed like a very real, very painful, very raw moment.

haha, that was an almost humorous reveal. I loved getting a glimpse of Vader's personality here-something beyond his usual, festering pain.

Such a great tangled 've kept that canon Jedi rigidity, which I like. It seems like a realistic flaw. Also, like the idea that Yoda was the more pragmatic, kinda bloodthirsty one...

damn, and that was a little Last Jedi esque in there, the way Leia begged to see if she could save Luke... Really fantastic space battles too. Loved the descriptions a lot-and that I didn't know if the Death Star was going to make it or not. Also nice line from Luke about more casualties there than Yavin-I like reminders like this that the Empire is not all the cackling evil-and that Luke is trying to do the right thing. Han's mostly an observer in this chapter, but a dam good one, and his pov really works for that run.

Great role for Han! Captivating, intriguing story, btw.

Leia arrived just in time, hurrah. I really love han in this chapter, musing about the way war is, the sides, and then Bria. Effective and wrenching. Fantastic space battles too. Many superlatives.

More great chapters. Luke is really interesting, and I love Vader. one thing: if you were ever to go back and edit: the lack of female characters is starting to grate on me. we have Beha, who is dead, and Mara, who is implied... and I could understand Palps making Luke's world as devoid of anything resembling a maternal figure as possible... but maybe the odd general? or more mentions of women? any women? Your story is great as it is, but I find myself reading now hoping some women show up.

Still enjoying this, but there's one thing that bugs me. it may be a difference in interpretation more than a flaw, but Palpatine's motivations... I don't quite get. He's jealous of the Skywalker affinity for the Force... he wishes he had their power, so he takes power them-okay, I guess. but it's very abstract. Does he want this power to rule the galaxy? why does he want to rule the galaxy? why is he ruling the galaxy, if all he wants is to dominate these two Force users?

I know there's more to his motivations but as they are presented, that's what I am getting. I love all the other characters-Indo is fascinating. I buy everyone's place in this except his.