Reviews for Center of the Sun
Guest chapter 5 . 11/28/2016
While this seems to be an intriguing idea, there are so many grammatical and spelling mistakes, and you fail to vary your sentence length and/or structure; all of the sentences are incredibly long and detailed, which makes for a difficult read. I'm now five chapters in and there has been no real plot development, and while I understand the importance of setting the scene, this is too much. Additionally, you spend too much time on descriptions. I believe you mentioned this in an earlier author's note, but my personal opinion is that you use a little too much detail. Yes, the readers should be able to visualize what they are reading, but an effective writer can convey a scene with only a few words, rather than a lengthy description. Wait a few years, develop your writing skills, and then rewrite this and I will happily read it. For now, though, I'm not going to continue.
alexa-hallywell chapter 36 . 6/14/2016
(reviewing chapter 34 here because I've already done it) I still can't get over the make up scene :') Hope you're doing alright dear! your beautiful writing is deeply missed xxxx
Guest chapter 15 . 3/21/2016
I'm in chapter 15... And I swear to god if either of my babies are hurt imma jump off a buiding and drag you along with me...
KayLovesBane chapter 4 . 1/5/2016
I'm not sure if it was intentional, but this has a Les Miserables feel to it and I LOVE IT!
ch chapter 2 . 9/24/2015
holy shit you are the most talented writer I've ever seen on this damned website, I seriously cannot express how impressed I am right now! This is the type of fic I read and then ends up raising the bar for every other fic to exist. A huge round of applause for you and your work ~
alexa-hallywell chapter 35 . 8/30/2015
Reading this chapter again because the scene where Alec does Magnus' makeup still makes me happy. By far my favorite scene ever :) hope you're doing ok! xx
DreamsofDeathandRoses chapter 9 . 7/20/2015
Hey I'm a bit confused about something… you say this world Alec and Magnus live in is a communist state that is suppoaed to resemble Nazi Germany, but Nazi Germany was a facist state which is a different type of government system. Also Nazi Germany was not as oppresive as your state. Your state is more like the USSR or Maoist China (both communist states), so…

Anyways other than that I mostly love your fic so far!
D chapter 42 . 6/15/2015
I just was looking for another fic by maybethere'shope and I catched there is really a second part comming. Really? This year? I mean the note in tumble is from may of this year! I am so exciting... I love your writing... And I come from time to time looking for the continuation of Possession and the second part of this one... And I really hope to read them soon... Well, good to know you are ok. And hope to read you again soon. :D Thanks! If you ever publish this let us know!
AzureSynergy chapter 1 . 6/11/2015
I couldn't even finish reading the first paragraph.

Never begin a story with weather. Never.

Usually I wouldn't be so blunt and uncaring, but you deserve the truth and I believe you are mature enough to handle it.

I am not one to skim past that which is reality.

Keep writing :)
Rapunzell chapter 40 . 6/7/2015
I couldn't ask for a more beautiful and powerful story, it hit me right so hard. Continue! So worth reading
thestorycastle chapter 6 . 3/25/2015
Hello there :)
This is the first time I'm reviewing your story, so yeah, hi! :)

I really enjoy your work. And I am stunned by the briliancy of your writing. You are constantly using new expressions, you chose words so carefuly and it seems like you are in the room with the characters, you know so well your scenary and you deal with what you have in front of you like a pro. The rhytm of your writing is fluent and makes me admire your style so much more, it's like I'm reading a poem rather than prose... but there is just one thiny little thing that's keeping you away from prefection. Your writing may have a nice tone of a poetry work, but it's still prose, and prose respects the rule of commas way more. I suggest you to read your chapters again, out loud, like you are reading it in class. Be careful to use commas when you take a breath before continuing the reading, also repeat the gramma rules when and where to use them.

I hope you take this review as an advice to improve your writig, it's not supposed to be an insoult or something of that sort...
spikerfang chapter 32 . 10/28/2014
I absolutely adore this story. I wish it was a printed copy ! _

I've always loved Jem as part of the Infernal Devices and Mortal Instruments series and I love that he gets his moment here especially this chapter. I've been reading so many fanfics online since I finished the books and hands down.. yours is the best. Magnus and Alec in your story are just beautiful and Hodge..WOW. Please do continue to write :D By the way can I get a copy of the "what if" story ? pretty pwease
siren-shipper chapter 42 . 9/22/2014
This story is seriously amazing! There are no other words for it! :)
malecmalecmalec chapter 17 . 7/19/2014
I love this
SupaKoolCookieMonsta chapter 40 . 4/19/2014
OMG that was such a great story! I love how you portrayed Magnus as like a Dark Knight/ Goblin King that was really cool. XD Though I must say I didnt see that Camille and Isabelle pairing coming.
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