|Reviews for Center of the Sun|
| thestorycastle chapter 6 . 3/25
Hello there :)
This is the first time I'm reviewing your story, so yeah, hi! :)
I really enjoy your work. And I am stunned by the briliancy of your writing. You are constantly using new expressions, you chose words so carefuly and it seems like you are in the room with the characters, you know so well your scenary and you deal with what you have in front of you like a pro. The rhytm of your writing is fluent and makes me admire your style so much more, it's like I'm reading a poem rather than prose... but there is just one thiny little thing that's keeping you away from prefection. Your writing may have a nice tone of a poetry work, but it's still prose, and prose respects the rule of commas way more. I suggest you to read your chapters again, out loud, like you are reading it in class. Be careful to use commas when you take a breath before continuing the reading, also repeat the gramma rules when and where to use them.
I hope you take this review as an advice to improve your writig, it's not supposed to be an insoult or something of that sort...
| spikerfang chapter 32 . 10/28/2014
I absolutely adore this story. I wish it was a printed copy ! _
I've always loved Jem as part of the Infernal Devices and Mortal Instruments series and I love that he gets his moment here especially this chapter. I've been reading so many fanfics online since I finished the books and hands down.. yours is the best. Magnus and Alec in your story are just beautiful and Hodge..WOW. Please do continue to write :D By the way can I get a copy of the "what if" story ? pretty pwease
| siren-shipper chapter 42 . 9/22/2014
This story is seriously amazing! There are no other words for it! :)
| malecmalecmalec chapter 17 . 7/19/2014
I love this
| SupaKoolCookieMonsta chapter 40 . 4/19/2014
OMG that was such a great story! I love how you portrayed Magnus as like a Dark Knight/ Goblin King that was really cool. XD Though I must say I didnt see that Camille and Isabelle pairing coming.
| SupaKoolCookieMonsta chapter 11 . 4/18/2014
Oh dear ... Hodge is really sketchy
| themortalfangirl chapter 42 . 3/5/2014
Wow. Where do I begin. I just read this whole story yesterday and today. I couldn't put it down. I have no words for how amazing this was. You write on a level that I have never seen a fanfiction writer write on before. I love Malec, and this made me love them even more. You have a way with words that leaves me speechless. I cried and laughed and smiled throughout. Simply beautiful. And I can't wait till you publish part 2 of Center of the Sun! I hope your life and your daughter is doing fine. I'm now one of your best friends! :D I don't have fics here, but I do on . My username is themortalfangirl it's all Malec. Okay, bye! :]
| Winter.Soul.95 chapter 42 . 2/13/2014
I just finished reading you story and I absolutely love it! Please update soon. I'm so addicted to this story. :)
| RedCoral chapter 42 . 2/4/2014
it is definately one of my favorite stories so far. They way you wrote it, made me feel as if I were a part of it!
| EmilyE.LOVES.JacobB chapter 32 . 1/25/2014
hey i love your story! can i get the 'What if' alec/jem scene?
love it so far xxx
| XxXDreamlessXsoulXxX chapter 2 . 12/23/2013
im listening to the song currently, and it really fits the story! i love it! :)
| XxXDreamlessXsoulXxX chapter 1 . 12/23/2013
reading the introduction and so far it sounds very interesting! :)
| Knowledge is a powerful tool chapter 42 . 11/26/2013
This story... powerful and dark, for sure. I really enjoyed reading it!
| poetic star chapter 2 . 11/11/2013
I was a bit distracted by the lack of commas here but I really like the setting and am anxious to see Magnus.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/24/2013
This is truly one of my fave FF's! The setting and mood are great. And how magnus has powers.. Seriously well written. I love it. Wish I could write this well!