Holy hell, this is great! Write moar!

We want moar

Hopefully, you'll eventually pick this fic up again since you're still active on DLP

I really, really, seriously hope that this fic continues... I'm loving every bit of this so far. please keep it up!

Yeaaaaaah, fucking awesome!

Such a shame, that such amazing story is abandoned. You built up a fascinating world.

realy interesting can't wait to see where this goes

Another thing: You wrote "ten years old than you" which should be "ten years older than you."

Small thing. You wrote "if her were not mistaken," which should be "if he was not mistaken." Otherwise, good chapter.

I'm extremely confused.

Literacy is good, wordsmithing is fine, just with it abandoned and now half read entire work so far, and it's disjointed, jarring, leaping around, like chopped up pieces of a story. Maybe the gaps would fill in in next few chapters, but if not, I'll have spent time in slices of this potpourri slice and dice-erama, but with it abandoned, I've no patience to continue with no solid plot or really finding one in sight.

Really love it
Shame it's been dropped

Wow

*Sigh*

This is such an interesting story that I'm unable to convey my disappointment on reading this last chapter. If you have the time, and aren't familiar with the video, Youtube "How to Eat a Big Mac" and you'll get a gist of my inner turmoil.

Cheers.

As much as I like this, I'm also very, very confused. That being said, I'm still kind of loving this weird story. :)