|Reviews for A Happy Fox and A Lazy Cloud|
| Haydogofthepack chapter 7 . 8/24
In general if find the popular trope of having a 4th wall conversation at the beginning of chapters to be deimmersive. As it often interrupts the flow of the story and almost universally has no point that could not be expressed in a much shorter authors note.
| CaptainToast321 chapter 4 . 8/16
Interesting story, but you need to work on your tenses.
The very first sentences for example. Instead of 'It has been', a better substitution would be 'It had been'. It flows a lot better, and matches the tense you used later in the same paragraph.
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 57 . 8/14
It's hard to imagine what Gaara would look like as a girl, but it makes me ship Gaara with Lee that much more.
| tenshiakuma14 chapter 55 . 8/9
Don't really like temari in this one..
| tenshiakuma14 chapter 56 . 8/9
I'm very sorry for ur lost. I'm glad u feel better and I continue to hope u don't give up on this wonderful story
| tenshiakuma14 chapter 57 . 8/9
Aww my poor sasuke
| hack.ex1 chapter 3 . 8/2
well... YOU HAVE THE POWE$!
| Yira chapter 3 . 7/27
Makes me wanna glomp shika too...
| Yira chapter 1 . 7/27
This seemed a bit bakashi. Is he born stupid or worked on it to be this dumb...
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 37 . 7/26
Cutest chapter yet, I'm glad that even as a girl she still makes Hinata faint.
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 13 . 7/21
I'm starting to ship Naruko & Sasuke . . .
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 7 . 7/17
I feel so sorry for anyone who has to take etiquette classes.
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 6 . 7/16
Can't say that I really liked the second half of this chapter because the whole refined classes Naruko is going to be taken seems like just something to get her's & Shika's feelings to progress which is something that isn't needed at their age (I assume they are 5 or 6). And since she's staying at the house (don't really understand why this would be a condition) she can't exactly skip the classes easily. It's also something that she would never agree to doing let alone just plan ignoring it at the mention of her friends staying which is something that shouldn't be aloud if it's a class for girls & if she's staying there it's more than likely other girls will be to.
Sorry for the rant I am enjoying the story, but this just seemed so out of the ball park from what has been going on so far, and if it's something that really needed to happen than it would have been more appropriate at an older age(8-13).
| 1whoknows chapter 4 . 7/12
Sorry to say, you need a beta. This is rather rough. And a little hard to read. But all in all I'm able to enjoy the story for it's story line. Just get someone to go over this with you and clean it up. it would be so much better.
| Guest chapter 57 . 7/8
I hope the seal gets removed soon... I've always thought it was bazaar that Naru never noticed their Shadow Clones memory transfer ability.. They don't always use about so they should have noticed way sooner then 3 years. Even if they could only handle training with 5 or 10 of them at once. I think Naru has such a hard time learning BC of Chakra High, if they don't expended energy at least every few hours their concentration becomes shot and sometime they even get head aches unless they use excessive amounts of Chakra at once. Nobody ever notices the Chakra Highs BC only around 10-20 people in the world have that amount of Chakra since the Uzumaki clan was wiped out...
Oh... Omio should bring up the Uzumaki Clan in front of the Konnoha 12JiraiyaKakashi and ask how Naruto feels being an Heiress since the only Uzumaki from Konnoha was Kushina (The hotblooded habanero) and she was the youngest child of the Clan leader...!