Reviews for Turn it back on
Guest chapter 1 . 4/17/2014
Yup! I like this better than the original! Great job!
Trisa Slyne chapter 1 . 1/16/2014
Haha I feel something like that should have happened after that scene. They cut out far too quickly- you know they did *something* more than just stare at each other. :D My favorite scene as well!
wolfking98 chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
why couldn't that happen in the game. nicely done story
DeathByMonkees chapter 1 . 7/17/2011
that was really sweet :) good job!
T2 Angel chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
In a word: AWESOME!
Pookyilicous chapter 1 . 3/15/2011
That was beautiful

I can't wait for more

:) It was lovely..

Pooky xxx
Isiscat321 chapter 1 . 3/13/2011
Super cute :) I loved this scene in the game and thought that it could have been longer. Great job!
MasterHollow chapter 1 . 3/7/2011
Ah yes that's how he scene should have been in. The game nicely written
HochiminShii chapter 1 . 3/4/2011
well done on your story i like your interpretation
Twilight684 chapter 1 . 2/23/2011
Awe! That was so cute! :3 I wish they really would've done that in the game. I thought they would make such a cute couple. x3 My friend kinda thought Trip was a bitch though, and I have to admit that at first I did too, but she's not so bad once you get used to her... Though it is really annoying when you get out of her range and she kills you . Now that pissed me off. Good fanfic though, I totally loved it. -
mythstoorfoot chapter 1 . 2/15/2011
This is quite lovely, and I really like the calming, starry atmosphere you create between Monkey and Trip - but I would've liked to see a little more interaction between them that wasn't just dialogue from the game. When you describe some of Trip's thoughts, I was waiting for you to expand upon them, but you didn't go as far as I wanted. This is your chance to tell us what you believe she's really thinking! :D

Sometimes your sentences run on a bit, like "Monkey didn't answer her just kept looking around, pacing up and down it was strange when she thought about it..." It would flow more easily, and sound a bit better, if you chopped your text up into several sentences or used more commas. :) Just remember to use punctuation in the right places: you seem to have an aversion to full stops at the end of dialogue!

A really nice try, I enjoyed reading this. :) Keep it up!